Janice Canerdy Poet Rhyme

A Quiet Visit

I smile remembering this small white house
                     surrounded by the ordinary things--
                     a neat, green yard and stately cedar trees,
                     a narrow gravel drive, the birds of spring.

                     Its most impressive feature was the swing,
                     now empty, faded, creaking in the wind.
                     The couple who once sat here side by side
		     reached out to me, and I became their friend.
                     
                     I can't rest in a swing no longer safe.                    
                     I'm satisfied to stand and reminisce
                     about the time when I, a restless youth,
                     was mentored by a couple I so miss.


Date: August 31, 2017
Contest Title: Your Very Best Rhyme of All Time (that has never won a contest)
Sponsor: Brenda Chiri

August 26, 2022
entered in the 2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 13 Contest
Sponsor: Mark Toney

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Funom Makama June 17, 2017 at 10:13 AM Hello friend. Its been a while. LORD! This is just vintage you! Excellent, Awesome and a master in this covetous craft of writing. Keep on flowing the ink of your mind. A 7 for sure. Janice Canerdy June 17, 2017 at 10:19 AM Funom, you have made my day! Thank you so much. It was great to hear from you. Janice

Connie Marcum Wong June 5, 2017 at 5:11 AM Janice, this poem has the beautiful kind of nostalgia that puts a lump in your throat! The way you have this laid out in form and your content are both superb! : ) Janice Canerdy June 5, 2017 at 7:12 AM Connie, thank you so much! Janice

Joseph May June 4, 2017 at 7:20 PM beautifully penned Janice..best wishes Janice Canerdy June 4, 2017 at 8:58 PM Thank you so much, Joseph! Janice

Andrea Dietrich June 4, 2017 at 5:47 PM this was simply beautiful, Janice!! Janice Canerdy June 4, 2017 at 8:59 PM Thank you so much, Andrea! Janice

Barry Stebbings June 4, 2017 at 2:58 PM Very evocative, Janice. Tugs me back to earlier years. Good luck in the contest. // Barry. Janice Canerdy June 4, 2017 at 9:00 PM Thank you so much, Barry. Janice

Probir Gupta June 3, 2017 at 6:01 AM I do have exactly identical memories ... can very gladly relate to ... lovely ... Janice Canerdy June 3, 2017 at 7:49 AM Probir, thank you so much! Janice