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Unrhymed pantoum with a rhyme couplet refrain

Goth mood’s not right, not bright enough. Fountain of sea, rapt in darkness. Crepuscular ink blocks sunlight. The cursive waves doth strain the wrist. Fa-la-la rhymes, leaping and lowing. Counting the black sheep - times not slowing. Fountain of sea, deep in darkness. Coarse keys, ivory black, musing. The cursive waves doth strain the wrist. Resist of playful sounds - thirsting. Fa-la-la rhymes, leaping and lowing. Counting the black sheep - times not slowing. Coarse keys, ivory black, musing, and refusing to budge - lines spurn. Resist of playful sounds - thirsting. The burn hisses and squeals; smudges. Fa-la-la rhymes, leaping and lowing. Counting the black sheep - times not slowing. And refusing to budge, lines spurn. Crepuscular ink blocks sunlight. The burn hisses and squeals; smudges. Goth mood’s not right, not bright enough.

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Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 4/30/2025 6:55:00 AM

Dear Kim, Oh My, you beautifully channel the gothic tradition-shadowy, atmospheric, and full of emotional depth. I love how your “crepuscular ink” and “cursive waves” evoke that sense of mystery and darkness central to gothic poetry, where light and hope are elusive, and time seems suspended. Like the best gothic works, your POTD blend melancholy with a haunting music, making even gloom feel strangely enchanting. Spring Blessings, my Dear Friend, Daniel

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/30/2025 2:58:00 PM

So good to hear from you! I was praying for your family this morning. Hugs!

Deb M

Date: 4/25/2025 5:12:00 AM

Belated Congrats on POTD Kim….enjoyed this fun creative write….Debx

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/25/2025 7:03:00 AM

Thank you, Deb!

Michael Tor

Date: 4/22/2025 6:17:00 PM

Kim been away just came back briefly to congratulate you for receiving POTD. Hugs...

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/22/2025 6:39:00 PM

Thank you, Mike! Hope all is okay.

Paige Hind

Date: 4/20/2025 9:26:00 PM

Congrats on this POTD! Sorry was not here to congratulate you then. :) Cheers! <3

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/22/2025 7:18:00 PM

Thank you, Paige!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/22/2025 6:39:00 PM

Thank you, Paige!

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 4/17/2025 9:30:00 PM

My belated congrats on your POTD.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/18/2025 5:12:00 AM

Thank you, Victor.,

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 4/15/2025 7:22:00 AM

Dear Kim, Congrats POTD!! Your pantoum swirls like a storm as gothic ink bleeds into sea-dark, keys hissing rebellion. I felt the crepuscular choke, the fa-la-la refrain cutting through like a cursed lullaby. Your words are alchemy turning resistance into rhythm, smudges into spells. Thank you for this haunting. The black sheep? They’re counting you now. Spring Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/15/2025 7:48:00 AM

LOL…they are counting me now…now that is funny! Thinking of you and praying comfort for your family, dear Daniel!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 4/14/2025 7:27:00 PM

You've given me the 'crepuscular ink' spirit, Kim. Fa-la-la! Congrats on POTD, Gershon

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/15/2025 7:47:00 AM

la-la-la-lol! Thank you!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 4/13/2025 8:14:00 AM

Congratulations on your POTD win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful write. Have a blessed day with your win...............

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/13/2025 6:37:00 PM

Thank you, Paula!

Ink Empress

Date: 4/13/2025 1:50:00 AM

A very thought provoking and light hearted write that flows like a melodious rhyme, that i would probably play on repeat! So catchy and gets the reader in a mood dear Kim. I love "Fa-la-la rhymes, leaping and lowing. Counting the black sheep - times not slowing." Sometimes whrn o cant sleep i do that! Reminds me of that as i read! I love gothic poems and once upon a time was into gothic things.Pleasure visiting your poem! Congratulations on receiving POTD! Sending you light always

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/13/2025 5:38:00 AM

Thank you, Ink! Bless you!

Brandy Nicole

Date: 4/12/2025 6:04:00 PM

Dearest Kim, I think those ' Fa-la-la rhymes, leaping and lowing, ' may hold some color in there somewhere. If not, they sure bring a smile. :) This is so clever and creative. Congratulations dear friend, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. :) Hugs, Brandy

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/13/2025 5:40:00 AM

LOL, I suppose their is a little color in there :)

I Am Anaya

Date: 4/12/2025 3:50:00 PM

Back to congratulate you Kimmy on your POTD! What i thought was out of fashion, gothic girl (although im not) seems to be quite on the forever list, at least for me, i love gothic poetry and its depth, its magik and yours too! Enjoy your day! ~Anaya

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/13/2025 5:41:00 AM

Thank you, Anaya! Hugs

Tom Woody

Date: 4/12/2025 1:14:00 PM

This is a playful little poem Kim. Enjoy your time under the full moon's light

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/13/2025 5:42:00 AM

So happy you find it playful, Tom, my friend!

Nancy Kaufman

Date: 4/12/2025 11:36:00 AM

Dear Kim, Congratulations on your pantoum POTD. I enjoyed the playful rhyme couplet refrain. Best to leave those black sheep alone though. Blessings

Mickey Grubb

Date: 4/12/2025 10:56:00 AM

Yes, wrestling with creative muse. Inspiration is sometimes elusive. Enjoyed your POTD very much, Kim. Congratulations!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/12/2025 10:59:00 AM

Thanks, Mickey! Yes!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/12/2025 10:29:00 AM

- Congratulations on your p.o.t.d., Kim ... Fa-la-la... hooray :) - hugs

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/13/2025 5:42:00 AM

LOL…You made me smile :)

Crystol Woods

Date: 4/12/2025 9:47:00 AM

So lyrical and deep... one of those poems one could read teen times and find new treasures waiting! Beautiful flow and rhythm! Congratulations! Xo

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/13/2025 5:45:00 AM

Thank you so much, Crystol!

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 4/12/2025 9:36:00 AM

This is an amazing poem, Kim! I love it! Congratulations on your POTD honor. :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/13/2025 5:46:00 AM

Thank you so much, dear friend!

Christuraj Alex

Date: 4/12/2025 9:24:00 AM

"Fa-la-la rhymes, leaping and lowing. Counting the black sheep - times not slowing." - A very powerful refrain. Filled with brilliant images. Congratulations!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/13/2025 5:46:00 AM

Thank you so much, Christuraj! :)

thriveni c mysore

Date: 4/12/2025 8:25:00 AM

Congratulations on POTD honor dear friend, Cheers!!!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/12/2025 9:13:00 AM

Thank you, Thriveni!

John Lawless

Date: 4/12/2025 7:53:00 AM

HEY....easy on the black sheep....I am a black sheep in a family of black sheep. A very interesting write Kim. I'd give its a double BAAAA BAAAAA

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/12/2025 9:14:00 AM

My baaaa’d! LOL. Thank you! ;)

Karen Jones

Date: 4/12/2025 5:21:00 AM

Loved the refrain and the imagery. The world is not filled with falalala and so your poem is needed and embraced! Congratulations on your honor of potd!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/12/2025 6:33:00 AM

Thank you, Karen! Hugs

Lin Lane

Date: 4/12/2025 4:30:00 AM

Fa-la-la-la-la, Kim. As stygian as your written lines may be, they are bright enough to be called poem of the day. Congratulations, and bah to the black sheep.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/12/2025 6:34:00 AM

Thank you, Lin! :)