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Poetry/Rhyme/A Place For Echoes
Copyright Protected, ID 09-1579-053-16
All Rights Reserved, 2023, Constance La France

Written September 16, 2023
For the International Contest, If This Was The Last
Sponsor, Silent One, Judged 09/18/2023

Third Place

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Like poets of old- writing is my life, it removes the torment of this worlds stabbing knife; and if this was my last poem I would be lost, oh, my heart, soul and spirit would be tossed. Poetry keeps memories loudly echoing ! In my mind raindrops cry and weeping willows weep, and hidden birds chirp, tweet, chatter, and peep; the cemetery has a deafening silence, I seek in the engraved names some guidance. Holding my battered notebook I begin to write, a poem for a contest invite; and memories begin whispering and moaning of you, like a dark cloud that is raining my tears fall blue. A fair gust blew- and my filigree words flew, I am writing the same sorrow nothing new; over and over and again, and my pen drips, drips for I am seeking some kind of Zen. Poetry keeps memories loudly echoing ! Poetry keeps memories loudly echoing ! I don't want this to be my last- poem; but my health is fading, so just in case I must pen a poem ! My heart is shattered, my soul battered, my spirit tattered, and my thoughts are tumbling and scattered; to look into my fathomless eyes would break your heart, for my pain, grief and sorrow has never and will never depart. If this was the last- last poem- I would write in my head words, and release them like fluttering birds; Poetry keeps memories loudly echoing ! Oh, how long will my head poems go drifting, floating, shifting, lifting, falling, crashing, until- they and me are no longer existing.

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Date: 9/20/2023 9:57:00 PM
Aw dear Constance, this is one of the outstanding poems that I have read recently... so deep, so emotional, and you used so many poetic devices so effortless, being a prolific writer that you are. I loved the title and the internal rhymes used. A big Fav. Hugs... ~ Ani
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Constance La France
Date: 9/21/2023 3:51:00 PM
Ani, thank you so much for the compliment, comment and the FAV, hugs
Date: 9/19/2023 2:40:00 AM
Brilliant poem, Constance, congratulations:)
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Constance La France
Date: 9/19/2023 12:05:00 PM
Joanna, thank you so much for the compliment and congratulations.
Date: 9/18/2023 11:15:00 AM
I felt so much emotion from your poem, i always do.. its so touching and heartfelt right from the opening.. I've never met a poem who write so deep... This was perfect for my contest.. the second stanza is so haunting and that is the one where I felt the most emotion.. I've written poems like this.. thinking about our last poem.. I know how important poetry is to you and that shows in this poem... Congratulations on your placement.. it was not easy.. im not doing premier again.
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Constance La France
Date: 9/19/2023 12:09:00 PM
Silent, thank you so the great comment, compliment on my poem and my writing and the congratulations, I don't like Premier either, thanks for the compliment on the title.
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Silent One
Date: 9/18/2023 11:19:00 AM
love that title also.
Date: 9/16/2023 7:52:00 PM
Constance, your poem is incredibly profound. Deeply moving, capturing the essence of reaching one's destiny. The metaphor used to describe the state of crashing and being on the edge of bursting into embers is both beautiful and powerful. The pain depicted in the poem lingers, never truly departing, evoking heartfelt emotions. The delineations are vivid, breathing life into the words, and the rhymes and creative word choices further enhance the impact. It is truly a masterpiece.
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Constance La France
Date: 9/19/2023 12:10:00 PM
Sotto, thank you so much for the wonderful comment and compliment.
Date: 9/16/2023 7:29:00 PM
Sigh, this is such a melancholic and poignant write for the contest, dear.How you've described the state of crashing and just on the verge of bursting into embers, when pain never truly departs,ah, so heartfelt. The evocative feelings just become alive with your impactful descriptions.I resonated with this piece so much and really love the ending too "they and me are no longer existing" Your rhymes throughout are very captivating and this write can make anyone emotional with its echoes!Best of luck
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Constance La France
Date: 9/19/2023 12:11:00 PM
Hiya, thank you so much for the nice comment, and compliment.
Date: 9/16/2023 1:18:00 PM
Love the title.....for it embraces the idea that there is no "last" poem as the "echoes" of a poem as those emanating from a stone dropped into a pond will forever undulate and affect the world. Beautifully done Constance
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Constance La France
Date: 9/16/2023 1:42:00 PM
John, thank you so much for that wonderful comment, so appreciated and thank you for the compliment.

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