A Pact Under the Sea

This is the story of a pact a pact that was made under sea, between the small fishes and Goliath he was obviously very hungry. A pact that was made under sea the Goliath was behind those fishes, he was obviously very hungry small fishes would make yummy dishes. The Goliath was behind those fishes hunger almost drove him crazy, small fishes would make yummy dishes what happened at the end let us see. Hunger almost drove him crazy but the tinies were surely clever, what happened at the end let us see they led him to a scuba diver. But the tinies were surely clever a pact was made at that time, they led him to a scuba diver "human flesh will be better to dine". A pact was made at that time between the small fishes and Goliath, "human flesh will be better to dine" this is the story of a pact. © kashinath karmakar (29th May,2011) ============================ Placement: 4th; (June 2011) Contest:Attack! Sponsor:Carolyn Devonshire
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Aboobacker Avatar
July 9, 2011 at 10:38 PM
wow.. that is really some craft... loved reading
Freeman Avatar
June 5, 2011 at 7:34 AM
Kashinath, Great to see in the winner's circle. Congratulations on a swell poem. Agape, Moses
Fraser Avatar
June 5, 2011 at 6:21 AM
Fine poem Kashinath, most deserved of it's placing in Carolyn's fine contest. Have a lovely Sunday :)
Maverick Avatar
June 4, 2011 at 12:34 PM
Congratulations on the win here Kashinath.
Gorelick Avatar
June 4, 2011 at 11:15 AM
What a clever way to write for this fishy contest. Congrats on your win..I think the "pact' idea is hilarious. BG
Dufresne Avatar
June 4, 2011 at 5:33 AM
excellent poem and an excellent win, Kashinath, I enjoyed it. Congrats to you
Horne Avatar
June 3, 2011 at 11:15 PM
LOL Congratulations on all your wins, Kash : )
Mehta Avatar
June 3, 2011 at 3:06 PM
Congratulations on the fourth place win in the contest of carolyn, kashinath
Brown Avatar
June 3, 2011 at 1:46 PM
Congratulations on your so wonderfully deserved win in Carolyn's "Attack" contest Kashinath. Love Carol
Devonshire Avatar
June 3, 2011 at 1:40 PM
Kash, I never expected to see a pantoum in this contest but you did a fabulous job with the form. Great work! Congratulations on your win! Love, Carolyn
Johnson Avatar
June 3, 2011 at 1:32 PM
Great Pantoum and scary ending. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
Onclaud Avatar
May 30, 2011 at 2:59 AM
lol! fun read, kashi.. so the schools of fishes have business meetings!! congrats on your win in my contest and wishes for this one as well.. visit my monopoly write; i need your feedback..:) !! miss ya..huggs,
Dietrich Avatar
May 29, 2011 at 11:50 PM
hahaha, those clever tiny fishies!!! You are really liking pantoums, Kash! This was a delightful way to tell your tale! Luv, Andrea ps. stanza 2, line 4: would MAKE
Song Avatar
May 29, 2011 at 3:34 PM
Underwater negotiations are very nice in this aquatic write, Kash! Carolyn will get a laugh with your ideas here! Guess what I did today?...u will be proud! ........guessing......guessing.......CRICKET! Yep, I learned to play Cricket from some reenactment soldiers of the Civil War era at our Freedom Festival this morning. It is a neat game with a lot of historical relevance. Glad I was able to experience it!! Have a great weekend. Gwendolen
Babcock Avatar
May 29, 2011 at 1:12 PM
Wonderfully created with the picture. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for your kind comments. God Bless Phyl
Sweetheart Avatar
May 29, 2011 at 12:47 PM
Wonderfully creative Kash and a sure winner for the artistry of the story line and Goliath is awesome figurehead in history now in your poetry brings great aura to the lines.. good luck luv.. it is a winner ...
Horne Avatar
May 29, 2011 at 12:37 PM
Lovely imaginative pantoum, Kash. Sure to be a winner, my friend : )
A   Avatar
May 29, 2011 at 11:44 AM
Wow, what a package.. of fish to deliver and a pact.. poor scuba diver... hope he was okay after the dine.. great poem...p.d.
K. Avatar
May 29, 2011 at 10:26 AM
ooh very nice how you wove this tale (or should I say pact?) and with a pantuom too! It worked pretty well for your story!- way too cool, Kashinath! & haha yup I am popping up again ;) nice to read your works & thanks for always reading mine :)
Foulk Avatar
May 29, 2011 at 9:48 AM
a very creative and clever piece of fine poetry. thank you for commenting on Breezes on the Lake.
Seraphin Avatar
May 29, 2011 at 7:42 AM
* “Smile * Very Ceatively Creative & Interesting Line of Thought * Dear Gifted Kash. * But What Is Flesh * This Dust In The Winds * Mere Wrapping Encasing Eternal Light. * Thus * Let Goliath Enjoy His Flesh * And Here's A Toothpick * Smile * We Keep His Ho Hum Smile Nice & Bright For * The Camera. * Thanks For Stopping By * Much Appreciated * Sincerely Yours * Sarah” *
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May 29, 2011 at 7:08 AM
Very nice Poetry my friend... always a joy to read your work.....Michael
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May 29, 2011 at 7:03 AM
Itriguing write, good luck in the contest. http://anthonynutter.weebly.com/
Poet Avatar
May 29, 2011 at 7:03 AM
Human flesh will made yummy dishes!
Mehta Avatar
May 29, 2011 at 7:02 AM
Brilliant creative pantoum, good luck in the contest, kashinath
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