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Romantic poem. Not a true Terza Rima, rhyme scheme AAA BBB CCC not to form.

A night in Venice (in sotto voce) Moonlight shimmers over the Adriatic sea Stars dancing on the waves in perfect symmetry We talk of ancient adventure and gallantry Masquerading dancers begin to fill the street Smiling as they parade by, shuffling their feet Unconsciously, we both are swaying to the beat Inside the trattoria*, the music man plays Vivaldi's concerto #4, in piano forte We whisper murmurs of love in sotto voce* As Casanova visions keep flooding my mind Vivaldi's music syncopates in double time Decoding my glances, your eyes begin to shine We took a water taxi, back to the Hotel We kiss under the Rialto bridge, passion swells What we did the rest of the night, I'll never tell Our night in Venice was a passionate affair Put on your black dress and pearls, and take me back there. *trattoria small dining establishment not a full menu like a restaurant * sotto voce in an undertone, literally low voice (pronounced vo chee) December 14,2016

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Date: 10/22/2017 7:30:00 PM
John such a stirring and beautiful write. So intimately told with a dreamy quality of splendor... Your last two lines are ravishing romantic reverie... Love it! Belated congrats on your top win with your fabulous poem.
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John Hamilton
Date: 10/22/2017 11:00:00 PM
Thanks Susan, you found my favourite form after lyric, Terza Rima, I don't know why but seems to me like the most romantic form, maybe the repeated rhymes to me seems more lyrical, I don't know. This is one of my personal favourites, thanks for the visit and comment, brings back nice memories!
Date: 5/15/2017 12:34:00 AM
Yes, this is very romantic :) Great write John!!
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John Hamilton
Date: 5/15/2017 8:24:00 AM
Thanks again Jeremy
Date: 3/4/2017 4:59:00 PM
This is so romantic and beautifully written, John! I love how we both had a kiss under the Rialto. Ive never been to Italy, but it's a dream to go one day. Thanks for telling me about your poem. I enjoyed... hugs, Rhonda
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John Hamilton
Date: 3/4/2017 7:23:00 PM
Amazing similarities, I was only there in my imagination, thanks for the read and comment!
Date: 1/10/2017 3:32:00 PM
wow, I am glad to see this got a trophy win. I read it again and liked it even better this time. It's really well written, John. BIG congrats.
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John Hamilton
Date: 1/10/2017 6:43:00 PM
Thanks Andrea glad you liked it, thanks for your wonderful entry in my contest.
Date: 12/20/2016 7:57:00 AM
Congrats John to win top place on your wonderful poem.
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John Hamilton
Date: 12/20/2016 10:50:00 AM
Thanks Anisha
Date: 12/20/2016 1:09:00 AM
Venice, only heard of it so far, thanks for taking me on a journey out there through your lovely poem, John:) congratulations on your top spot:)
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John Hamilton
Date: 12/20/2016 5:44:00 AM
Thanks Jo for the visit and comment, much appreciated.
Date: 12/19/2016 8:01:00 PM
Congratulations, John, so well done - it's a magical place.
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Doug Vinson
Date: 12/19/2016 8:44:00 PM
One restaurant had 5 or 6 chihuahuas that would race out to greet you on the walkway to the front door, howling hilariously.
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John Hamilton
Date: 12/19/2016 8:36:00 PM
Thanks Doug it is indeed!
Date: 12/19/2016 3:33:00 PM
Gorgeous, makes me feel I was there. Congrats on a terrific win.
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John Hamilton
Date: 12/19/2016 4:47:00 PM
Thank Phil nice to hear from you, take care.
Date: 12/19/2016 11:29:00 AM
Hope you had a balleni at Harrys, congratulations...
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John Hamilton
Date: 12/19/2016 4:46:00 PM
Nope but a few cinzano's, and limoncello's for sure.
Date: 12/19/2016 11:01:00 AM
Great poem about a great place! Congrats! :-)
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John Hamilton
Date: 12/19/2016 4:45:00 PM
Thanks Mark nice to hear from you.
Date: 12/19/2016 10:56:00 AM
Congratulations on a top win for a top poem about beautiful night. Wow, Venice. it must be a lovely, romantic place.
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John Hamilton
Date: 12/19/2016 4:44:00 PM
Thanks Janice, it was lovely in my imagination.
Date: 12/19/2016 10:25:00 AM
Una bella notte...and a beautiful poem...in Venice !...what more do you need...Bravo!!!...congrats John...^WW^
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John Hamilton
Date: 12/19/2016 4:44:00 PM
Thanks WW nice to have you drop by my little ditty.Congrats to you too!
Date: 12/19/2016 8:23:00 AM
Congratulations, John! A beautiful story, well told. ...Fran
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John Hamilton
Date: 12/19/2016 4:43:00 PM
Thanks Fran nice to see you! Congrats to you too!
Date: 12/19/2016 6:26:00 AM
I love the journey this took me on John. I could visualize the scene so perfectly as I have visited there long ago. Have a h a copy holiday! : ) 7
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John Hamilton
Date: 12/19/2016 4:42:00 PM
Thanks Connie
Date: 12/18/2016 3:36:00 PM
Venice can be both romantic and inspiring; this poem is ample proof of that, John! Regards // paul
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John Hamilton
Date: 12/18/2016 5:22:00 PM
Thanks Paul appreciate the visit and comment.
Date: 12/18/2016 9:56:00 AM
A beautiful write John, very romantic.
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John Hamilton
Date: 12/18/2016 11:41:00 AM
Thanks James.
Date: 12/17/2016 9:11:00 PM
Oh, I love this and "what we did the rest of the night I'll never tell" awesome!! This is such a nice poetry form.
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John Hamilton
Date: 12/18/2016 8:34:00 AM
Thanks Andrea nice to hear from you!
Date: 12/17/2016 4:14:00 PM
*sigh* Aye me! Bravo!! :) deb
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John Hamilton
Date: 12/18/2016 8:34:00 AM
Thanks Deb for the visit and comment!
Date: 12/15/2016 5:14:00 PM
WOW what a beautiful romantic journey John - absolutely fabulous imagery:-) I'm visiting italy next year !!! hugs Jan xx
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John Hamilton
Date: 12/15/2016 9:51:00 PM
Thanks Jan, Italy has a special place in my heart. Enjoy when you go, you gotta do the Amalfi coast.
Date: 12/15/2016 11:50:00 AM
Wow John, this was dream-like and so beautifully done. Sounds like the perfect romantic evening to me.
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John Hamilton
Date: 12/15/2016 4:53:00 PM
Thanks Chris, Venice is so romantic.
Date: 12/15/2016 9:58:00 AM
Lovely, John!
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John Hamilton
Date: 12/15/2016 10:45:00 AM
Thanks Kim