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The sinking sun left hurriedly from Bethlehem, Leaving a dark chilly sky without any clouds The town was overcrowded with many people, The smell of sweat reeked every where, no place to wash. Late at night two figures limped into town dead tired. The woman felt the pain for birth was immanent. The husband knocked door after door but all was full. No one was sorry for them and preferred to sleep. Swiftly a star appeared and shone on a stable. The woman riding a donkey sought refuge there. The old man scattered clean fresh straw for the maiden, And whist the man sought food and drink, she birthed a child. The breath of a cow and donkey kept the babe warm. Angels led startled shepherds to adore the child Hosanna, sang from above heavenly music. He was the King of Kings. born to save all the world. 31 December 2021

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Date: 1/4/2022 10:18:00 AM
Very original line, "The breath of a cow and donkey kept the babe warm." A nice retelling of the Christmas story.
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Date: 1/3/2022 3:36:00 AM
Beautiful Victor. This story always brings tears to my eyes no matter how many times I hear it or what time of year it is. God Bless , JB
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Date: 1/1/2022 1:18:00 PM
This is beautiful. A painting in words of the King of kings, born in a manger. I felt tears springing to my eyes. God bless you! Happy new year Victor!
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Date: 1/1/2022 12:48:00 PM
A nice and brief summary this is, my friend. happy New Year to you. Wish me luck answering about 30 comments now!!
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Date: 12/31/2021 7:36:00 PM
I enjoyed your marvelous retelling of the beloved story, Victor. Wishing you all the blessings of the New Year, Evelyn
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Date: 12/31/2021 3:46:00 PM
Happy New Year dearest friend, may the upcoming year be filled with God's blessing and healing for you and for all :)
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Date: 12/31/2021 11:19:00 AM
Victor I enjoyed your poem, you added human feeling to the Birth of Jesus and made it come to life. HNY ~ Debra
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Date: 12/31/2021 11:06:00 AM
You have spun a beautiful nativity story, a modern day Luke! Happy New Year, Paulette
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Date: 12/31/2021 9:16:00 AM
Victor... Best wishes and blessings for 2022.
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Date: 12/31/2021 8:31:00 AM
You produced a picture that captured the hearts of believers worldwide, and you conveyed a tale with your words that were both poetic and compelling. Victor, I wish you a good New Year and many blessings in the next year:)
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Date: 12/31/2021 7:44:00 AM
- A beautiful poem, you told a story with your words so skillfully - I wish you a blessed new year, my dear friend Victor :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 12/31/2021 7:06:00 AM
This delightful Nativity poem is an ideal way by which to end the year, Victor. ~ I hope you are keeping well, my friend. ~ I wish you a peaceful new year; may it be more kind to all of us. // paul
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Date: 12/31/2021 6:43:00 AM
Thanks for sharing this. A blessed New Year 2022 to you and your loved ones. God bless you.
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Date: 12/31/2021 5:01:00 AM
You have painted the nativity scene in such vivid colors. I feel the fatigue of the tired travelers and God's final intervention.... ! The King of kings was born into a stable , to show the world that humility is the distinctive virtue needed for mankind ! Great write sweet friend.
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Date: 12/31/2021 4:48:00 AM
You painted the scene that captures the hearts of faithful all over the world. A story well told, Victor.
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Date: 12/31/2021 4:36:00 AM
You captured the nativity scene well in your verse Victor. Tom
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Date: 12/31/2021 3:15:00 AM
I like your retelling of the birth of Jesus. It is nice to read it again. Thanks for your visit to my page. Sara
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Date: 12/31/2021 2:31:00 AM
You have displayed the nativity scene wonderfully, Victor, wishes for the upcoming New Year:)
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Date: 12/31/2021 2:25:00 AM
Yes. He saves all who believe. God bless you dear Victor. Love, Gina
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