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Dream-worker delves deeply into my dream; vibrations fondle anticipation foreplay wakes wide-eyed swells of liquid libido quake the rendezvous edge - a primordial being in his prime a masculine ego quest for affaire d’amour; her night-loving body c h a s e d around circular seasons across sky-cycles of solstice and equinox only to lose his bemusing muse in the shadow of the sun betrothed in throes of gravity a calamity for lack of wings the curse and the charm of a mad marriage; that which binds his life-blood to Earth guards her chaste gate to the divine ..tonight he is mine his cresting chants enchant the timpani of this earthy Venus -- consecrating is his spell.. spindrift a magical mist spins a mindscape heady heart balm to soothe an ache a rub of windswept whispers and potent physical prowess e x e r t i o n and e x h a l a t i o n artful is the imagination’s mastery when surfing a rolling ridge of passion baiting and waiting to be the object of his misplaced attraction - ..wander-lust breakers whet my appetite.. I recline in need of a remedy a brunette arched in sultry spread raven tressed but born of the lava flow long ago a molten maiden of the volcano’s sacral chakra.. wild his seismic song! trembling the girlish cilia of this untamed flame-azalea excitement mounts my marrow and seeds my skin unruly is the meter of his rune - the romancer a poetic pyromancer conjures embers of my ancient titian spirit arousing the black pearl luster of my bed erogenous zone glistens; a secluded strand with carnal plans a tryst with the king of tides his majesty comes only with the highest rise unleashed the penetration of his greedy grasp against grains of glossy naked friction - grinding – Indigo Id silver-maned.. a savage romantic nomadic with tantric intentions in salacious supine I suit the urgent roil of his royal surf the weight of El Mar seizes the expanse of my thirst pressing upon stroking soaking my sable sands his yearn meets my cinders’ burn face to face.. I but a taste bud savoring the braise of his brine as he spills the brim with “love the one you're with” secrets a muscular toy doomed in the pull of a magnetic bloom; the moonflower slowly unfurls her coy ploy her face in phases beguile and the fluid sensualist is foiled - the fertile flirtations of a dreamy damsel ..her night-side-negligee slipping from creamy skin bit by bit.. grows a queen fully ripe honeydew nudity flaunted in pearly light as his soulmate-swan bares her heavenly soul – an amorous play a drama in zodiac footlights; a buttery moonglade rides astride the trans-Atlantic pleasure-seeker cosmic copulation fraught with fate and flaw - a slippery wraith with the grace of Aphrodite’s cape.. an artiste as airy as a sparrow’s breath her glittery drape but only fool’s gold — ‘tis just her pale wiles strewn across his lonely miles a ghost of stardust-desires teasing but not pleasing till raven’s wings curtain the stage and a thinned crone wanes in a shroud of meditation I purr -- a black cat ‘neath inherited hands of hedonism his slow-slide spurs my darkened pebbles’ shiver - I become the drum and succumb to thrums of percussive persuasions aquarian conguero performs a turbulent affair of improvisation cross-beats of crazed craves in swollen waves and surrender seductive the groove just before the hard rock gyrate as the devil’s dance splashes a thousand cymbals of the sea I swoon 'neath his unselfish salt of satisfaction the unbridled thrust of his vow-breaking must in a state of continuous sinuous want - lovers binge on wet undulations; libation a liberation a frenzy of force when the moon is new and hidden from view my ebon canvas streaked a white abstract sea spume in shapes of lipping sensations - proof of passion in brushstrokes laid two sides of a triangle embracing the art of eros energy shifts when motion is stilled and inertia sifts when stillness is moved as the maiden goddess ascends playful her invisibility to naked eyes darkness swells undraped imaginations and worldly realities share a wild priority consentaneous simultaneous — momentaneous against the certainty of eternity over the moon onyx sheets ripple as we ripple in symmetry unifying if only briefly peaking peeking at the codex of heaven’s earthly poetry the muse of two fuse as one tryst-talk trololo escalates to a bow-and-violin concerto virtuoso verse created for the ages while we own the world amid twilight’s twirl of a midnight’s hourglass — then — leaving me as I lay a mistress mirroring the Milky Way galaxy’s nightglow consoles my afterglow star-crossed — a sonnet’s couplet uncoupled left to live on the linger of flavor clinging to my palate till another time when the next page is turned he withdraws a coltish Romeo in pursuit of a moonchild sheathed in mini-skirt shine panting for the curve in the re-emerge of her slender crescent his spirit a stallion blind to the altitude of her ambition this theatrical starlet.. the pale rose unattainable — shy yet sly in transform from a wisp to voluptuous before her well-rehearsed disappearance from the sky-stage tethered to the cycle of her mystery, his mania; the hard-drive of a frothy blue roan in full gallop 'til absorbed by the cushion of my ageless comfort - driven-hard by the bite of the bit the bliss of the whip reigns at the end of her feminine reins — a bronc bucking and rearing in relentless unrequited roam; male of magnitude fueled to ravish yet another distant shore I sure as hell envy! Susan Ashley July 16, 2022 ~ First Place ~ Premiere Contest: A Brian Strand Premiere no 1211 Sponsor: Brian Strand *Image by Joe Dudeck; published May24, 2021 *el mar: Spanish; the sea; a masculine noun

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Date: 8/31/2023 10:50:00 AM
You want the truth, you shall have it. It's poetrysoup, not book soup. We read we feel we critque and we try not to get sleepy. A few High phrases here and there to spice up the short story or discription. Enough to get attention AND admiration. Remember it's what comes from what's inside of you because it's inside of the reader too. Capture a moment of their life. Don't let their whole life pass before their eyes. There. You asked for it.
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Date: 9/2/2023 8:55:00 AM
Dear TS, thank you for your valued thoughts.. there is no line restriction on poetry, some of the most influential and admired poems are thousands of lines long.. Beowulf has 3,182 lines composed in alliterative meter. The Fall of the Princes is over 36,000 lines composed in rhyme royal. My humble poem is approx 165 lines of free verse. I admit this is a rather long poem for PS, but, there are longer poems posted here. Longer poems allow for the theme, imagery, metaphors to be expanded beyond the restrictions of say, a 14 line sonnet. Composing a long poem is challenging, and indeed, reading a long poem can be challenging as well. Your time spent with my poem is appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 8/26/2023 11:46:00 AM
OMG It's a book!
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Date: 8/26/2023 11:59:00 AM
Is that a good or a bad thing? Though a long piece, it is poetic, no? I’m interested in your deeper thoughts whatever they may be..
Date: 5/7/2023 10:38:00 AM
Dear Susan, Your exquisite poem, surely stitched with silk from a cloud, should be a book so all could share its wonder!
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Date: 5/8/2023 9:40:00 PM
Dear Ann, I applaud your time spent with my rather lengthy poem and I appreciate your beautiful thoughts.. "stitched with silk from a cloud" - wow, breathtaking, my friend! Your book idea piques my curiosity. Thank you for your heartwarming comments and for your poetic friendship. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 5/7/2023 10:26:00 AM
Dear Susan, Your incredibly beautiful poem, stitched with silk from a cloud, should be a book so all could wonder at its loveliness. Truly a masterpiece, Susan!
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Date: 5/8/2023 9:25:00 PM
I am both humbled and honored by your wonderful response to my poem. I never thought of it as being a book.. a very intriguing thought. Thank you, Ann, for your gracious visit. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan
Date: 4/26/2023 5:51:00 AM
WoW! Susan, You have penned such an epic masterpiece. Your content and imagery were off the charts. You took your reader on an emotional ride. It was well worth the ride, I must say. Congratulations on your trophy win. It was well deserved. Have a terrific day my friend;-) Alexis
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Date: 4/27/2023 8:43:00 AM
Dear Alexis, my lovely friend, I'm so glad to see you back. Thank you for your precious and uplifting comments. I'm so glad you enjoyed the emotional ride! Thank you for your time spent with my rather long poem, your perseverance is truly appreciated, as are your kind congrats. I haven't been able to be here much in the past two months, but I will catch up with your amazing poetry very soon. Warmest wishes for a wonderful day.. ~Susan
Date: 4/26/2023 1:12:00 AM
Need to save this for a re-read, time and again ~ a clear fav. Warmest congratulations on your inevitable trophy win in Brian’s contest, dear Susan. Thanks for sharing.
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Date: 4/27/2023 8:35:00 AM
Dear US, thank you for your uplifting comments and lovely congrats. Your time spent with my rather long poem is truly appreciated and it is heartening to know that you have faved it for future reads. I am deeply touched and honored. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 4/25/2023 10:10:00 PM
What an astonishing piece of marvel!! Congratulations on your well-deserved trophy win!!I so love this part, "the muse of two fuse as one tryst-talk trololo escalates to a bow-and-violin concerto virtuoso verse created for the ages while we own the world amid twilight’s twirl of a midnight’s hourglass" Spectacular imagery!! A fave for me.
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Date: 4/27/2023 8:31:00 AM
Dearest JCB, it is always such an honor to receive your visit and inspiring comments, they never fail to touch me deeply. I'm so glad to know what you enjoyed most about my poem. Thank you for your time spent with my rather long poem, your perseverance is truly appreciated, as is the distinction of your fave. My heart is ever grateful for your poetic friendship. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 4/25/2023 6:34:00 PM
Susan, you've written a hymn to a wonderful legend right here! What a wonderful present you have made for both myself and everyone else who takes the time to read such magnificent poetry. The great verse that you have produced is elevated to a higher level of sophistication by your careful selection of metaphors as well as the immaculate execution of your syntax. Congratulations on your podium win
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Date: 4/27/2023 8:27:00 AM
Dear Lasaad, I am honored and humbled by your valued thoughts. Thank you for your time spent with my rather long poem, your perseverance is truly appreciated, as are your kind congrats. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 4/25/2023 11:47:00 AM
My Dearest Rhyme Time Friend, which line, which image, which imagery do I pick to highlight in this poetic marvel, this ode in a romantic saga! What a gift you have given me and all who read this stunning poetry. Your poetic gift soars like the words on the page rise to heights I can only dream of dearest friend! Thank you for this loving gift straight from your beautiful spirit! Congratulations on your win! More than deserving! Sending blessings in shades of pure rose!!!
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Date: 4/27/2023 8:03:00 AM
My Dearest Rhyme Time Friend, my heart soars on the wings of your uplifting response to my poem. Your beautiful spirit never fails to enkindle a special kind of joy upon reading your amazing thoughts that light and warm me to the depths of my being!! I am honored by your time spent with my poem and humbled by the precious gift of your poetic friendship. My dear sis, my heart is ever grateful to be filled with your inspiring poetic presence! I relish your visit and cherish your kind congrats, my lovely soul sis! I applaud your perseverance in staying with this long poem till the end :) Warmest wishes, love and hugs sent on the ripples of the wind.. ~Susan
Date: 4/25/2023 8:51:00 AM
- An awesome poem, Susan (although it was very long:) - Congratulations on a TOP first place in the Brian Strand contest 1211 :) - hugs
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Date: 4/25/2023 4:14:00 PM
Dear Anne-Lise, thank you for your lovely comment and heartwarming congrats. Indeed, this is a very long poem and I applaud your perseverance to see it through to the end.. your time spent with my poem is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 12/5/2022 6:31:00 PM
Susan, this is incredible. You write in a language that I'm not that familiar with, even so; it is so very beautiful. You are gifted my dear friend. Exceptional poetry...as always. Sending love & hugs ~Charlie
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Date: 12/10/2022 8:48:00 AM
Dear Charlie, thank you for exploring the emotions of this very long poem and for having the patience to see it through to the end.. lol! My longest poem ever, whew!! Your uplifting comments are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 9/13/2022 10:38:00 PM
OH, wow wow, a poem to enhance the poetic universe, Such sculptured words from deep within, may the curtain never fall on such beauty.
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Date: 9/15/2022 6:16:00 PM
Dear Harry, your thoughts are a joy to receive. Thank you for your amazing comments, my friend, I am honored. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 9/6/2022 2:43:00 PM
Your pen never fails us dear Susan! Magnificent and sublime from beginning to end. So uniquely yours. A fave!!
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Date: 9/6/2022 10:06:00 PM
Dear JCB, it's such a pleasure to see you! Thank you for your beautiful response to my poem and for sharing in its emotions with me. I'm so glad you enjoyed this rather long poem. I am honored by your fave and humbled by your precious thoughts. Both are truly appreciated, my sweet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 9/6/2022 10:49:00 AM
Very passionate work. Way to go. Thank you for sharing and for dropping by my page and leaving such a nice comment. This one borders on raunchy so of don't you think. LOL..Sara
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Date: 9/6/2022 10:02:00 PM
Dear Sara, thank you for your time in reading this long poem and for sharing your wonderful thoughts. Both your visit and your kind words are appreciated. You're welcome for my visit to your lovely haiku. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 8/20/2022 12:38:00 PM
wow, this is truly amazing, my friend - there are so many wonderful phrases here that I had to read it twice. Your pen never disappoints!
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Date: 8/21/2022 8:03:00 AM
Dear Jack, your gracious visit is received with gratitude. Thank you for spending time with this rather long poem. I appreciated your perseverance in reading till the end lol! I am thrilled to know you read it twice.. your beautiful comments are uplifting! You are appreciated, my friend.. ~Susan
Date: 8/12/2022 11:39:00 PM
This is awesome poetry, Susan. You have certainly learnt the tricks of the trade...using every available tool with utmost relish. The subject matter has been dealt with sensually, passionately and yet gracefully. What strikes me as well is that despite its length, the poem never loses its cadence and purpose. You are a natural writer, born to shine and please. [another fav] ~ Warm regards and hugs, my friend. // paul
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Date: 8/13/2022 5:55:00 PM
Dear Paul, I am beyond thrilled by your inspiring response to my poem! It's a pleasure to receive such stunning feedback, especially since you're held in my highest esteem as a wonderful friend, a gifted poet and an uplifting mentor. Thank you for your beautiful thoughts and for the grand honor of your fav. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan
Date: 8/5/2022 6:17:00 PM
"A Kept Woman" is an amazing/powerful~~write/picture. Have a great/blessed weekend.............
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Date: 8/7/2022 9:23:00 AM
Dear Paula, thank you for your beautiful comments. You inspire me, my wonderful friend. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan
Date: 8/1/2022 7:49:00 PM
Some powerful poetry! A sensual powerhouse, Susan!
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Date: 8/5/2022 8:06:00 AM
Dear Kim, it's a delight to receive your wonderful visit and inspiring words! Thank you, my friend, I'm thrilled to know you enjoyed this poem. Your comments are treasured. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 8/1/2022 4:36:00 PM
Susan, dear friend, dear poet, the creativity and imagination to create this beautiful poem is truly art...it glows like the light from a million comets and flows with the explosive heat of Mt Vesuvius as it smothered Pompey...your passion is hotter than the sun and more profound than the ocean, I'm in awe of your poetry, dear friend, dear poet...Frederic
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Date: 8/7/2022 9:21:00 AM
Frederic, dear poet, dear friend, I relish your uplifting and expressive comments in splendid hues of metaphorical beauty. What a thrill to read your precious thoughts! Your comments are lush and I appreciate both your artistry and friendship. Thank you, Frederic. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 8/1/2022 8:37:00 AM
wonderful story...
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Date: 8/3/2022 12:13:00 AM
Always my dear Susan...
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Susan Ashley
Date: 8/1/2022 4:00:00 PM
Dear Pashang, it's so wonderful to see you! Your gracious visit and lovely comment is gratifying to receive.. thank you, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 7/31/2022 3:05:00 PM
Susan your sensuality speaks in a unique language that takes the reader into a climatic journey and they are controlled to relish in this sensual experience. Your Poetry is profound to say the least. Your mental creativity reflects the depth of knowledge and creativity that you possess. It is impressive and iconic. It has been a while since I have read you and I for the life of me do not know why. You are an exceptional writer and one that is at the very top of their game. Congratulations...
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Date: 8/1/2022 4:09:00 PM
Dear Michael, I am humbled and honored by your comments. Your rich and generous thoughts are touching. I'm elated to know you enjoyed this poem. Thank you for exploring the pathos of this poem and for having the patience to see it through to the very end. Your uplifting presence and kind congrats are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 7/31/2022 11:04:00 AM
This cosmic, primal, and erotic episode had me relishing in and yearning with languid eyes in peaked expectancy. Your scholarly words consummated with sultry desires Susan. Hugs ~Anaya
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Date: 8/1/2022 4:14:00 PM
Dear I Am Anaya, I relish your beautiful comments. I'm so pleased to know you enjoyed my poem. Thank you for your precious words, they mean so much coming from a grand poetess of your finesse. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan
Date: 7/30/2022 12:53:00 PM
Hi Susan Ashley, an arousing primordial delicious delicacy to be savored. A sensual pleasure treasure trove. Fine write, Robert Gorelick
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Date: 7/31/2022 8:06:00 AM
Hello Robert Gorelick, it's wonderful to receive your comments. You are a poet of finesse even within the confines of this small comment box. Thank you for surfing the ridge of passion and sailing the spindrift of imagination. Your beautiful comments are prized. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 7/27/2022 4:41:00 PM
Hi Susan, your words still take flight in golden wonder, this is an excellent write, has to be a fave. You take the heart to new levels of understanding, the soul to Heaven's own wonder. Words to set the heart beating in reckless wonderment at your creativity. This is poetry at its best. Your gift of words has indeed grown. The emotions flow down a golden page of sensual pleasure. Have a wonderful evening. Hugs always ..... Mike. XX
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Date: 7/31/2022 7:52:00 AM
Hi Mike! It's a joy to receive your beautiful comments. I'm so glad your heart sailed in the passion and imagination of this rather long poem. Thank you for your poetic friendship and for the high honor of your fave. I am truly honored. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 7/26/2022 4:01:00 AM
Wow... So magical.. Powerful and romantic.. Loved it... Thanks for sharing Susan. Your poetry is amazing. Blessings!! Paghunda
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 7/27/2022 3:55:00 PM
Pleasure is all mine
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Susan Ashley
Date: 7/27/2022 7:07:00 AM
Dear Paghunda, thank you for your time in reading this long poem and for your beautiful comments. I am uplifted by your wonderful presence and inspired by your lovely thoughts. Your wonderful friendship is held in my gratitude always. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan
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