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The day has come, a smiling sun shines through bold bars, across the room to the door, ajar, projecting the bars on the door as if it is definitely and eternally closed to go out or come in. The swirling, smiling haze of the past few days is slowly lifting. The rectangle of the open door has an attractive oblong shape the form of a mouth, telling me I am welcome to enter it - or is it leave? - The bed has a mind of its own, it owns me, it thinks.... When I try to lift my arm, the bed stops me, stalling me, suspending my arm mid-air, by encircling my bony wrist, encompassing it with an iron grip. My peaceful plea, brought with ever so supportive but strong words that I cannot repeat here, has no result. The opposite is true, it does a sincere attempt to keep me there forever. Turning me into a spreadeagled, reluctant, foul-mouthed lover. The door decides enough is enough. It squeaks, squirms and squeals, uttering a single, long lived OOOOOOOOoooooooooooo in a deafening ear-shattering pitch.... And in they run, the men in white, with their syringes and multi-coloured pills. They beam benevolently at me, and then show the bed its rightful place: it's a bed, not a guard! And shamefully it complies, clips open its claws, groans as I sit upright Finally, the day begins! *** May 4, 2017 Copyright © Darren White

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Date: 5/7/2017 12:08:00 PM
The poem as a metaphor reminds me of the various ways I've been confined both for and against my own good. "Turning me into a spreadeagled, reluctant, foul-mouthed lover." is a powerful statement of ambivalence and a familiar one.
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Darren White
Date: 5/7/2017 12:11:00 PM
I am writing a series about mental hospitals, this was the third one of the series. I am not glad you recognize it, I do am grateful that you recognize it the same time, thank you :)
Date: 5/6/2017 2:09:00 AM
The reader lives the experience with you in that confining bed. John
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Darren White
Date: 5/6/2017 6:30:00 AM
Yes, if you could feel that way, I succeeded, thank you :)
Date: 5/5/2017 7:15:00 PM
Thank God, the day always begins. Love, love, love it.
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Darren White
Date: 5/6/2017 1:10:00 AM
Thanks Elle, and yeah every day a new day :) Shukran sadeekati
Date: 5/5/2017 7:49:00 AM
Thank God that bed let go, it was starting to sound like a scary book. On a more serious note though I hope you are alright dear Darren?
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Darren White
Date: 5/5/2017 8:15:00 AM
I am completely fine, I am writing a series of short narratives about mental hospital though, and in itself that is a terrible thing, but there is also a lot to laugh about, it brings wonderful inspiration and for us 'inmates', there is a lot to smile about. Thank you for your concern my dear friend <3
Date: 5/5/2017 4:55:00 AM
Good Morning Darren. This entry is two folded. I see and read the serious side. I also see the side of play. The serious touches my heart. The play proves style and flair. And my dear Darren you have flair. Both sides Darren are respectfully and wonderfully conveyed. Honestly. Have a wonderful afternoon. Well done entirely with creativity from your pen.
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Darren White
Date: 5/5/2017 6:37:00 AM
I love this comment because both sides are equally important. I like to write satirical sometimes about serious subjects, to make them accessible, thanks my friend :)
Date: 5/5/2017 12:03:00 AM
A very emotional piece to absorb Darren. Mental health facilities could be so much better. Blessings my friend : ) 7
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Darren White
Date: 5/5/2017 12:15:00 AM
They could, but this was not meant to write against them. Sometimes that way of keeping people tied down is the only way for them to be able to relax. Thank you Connie :)
Date: 5/4/2017 11:04:00 PM
I'm so glad the 'Haze' is lifting for you, Duir! The worst thing they do over here, (and I'm assuming over there too) is every hour during the night while you are trying to sleep, is open the door and SHINE a torch at you! This 'narrative' I found very relatable!
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Darren White
Date: 5/5/2017 12:14:00 AM
It's the same here Budge. You're already on edge and exhausted because of all the.... just because. And then they keep you awake! That's 100% opposite what they want you to be: relaxed, lol. Good you can relate, means I did a good job :)
Date: 5/4/2017 10:19:00 PM
Eek. I shudder. ;) a 7 for the emotional response 'cause that's what good art does. xomo
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Date: 5/5/2017 7:15:00 AM
;) I love good horror/comedy my dear and relate, without shackles but relate none the less to imprisoning hospital beds. Your talent beams me up.
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Darren White
Date: 5/5/2017 12:11:00 AM
Ouch mo, eeek? :) But yes, I understand what you mean, thank you for the 7 my friend.
Date: 5/4/2017 1:40:00 PM
I need that bed poet
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Darren White
Date: 5/4/2017 1:50:00 PM
I don't think you'd like it very much, it won't let you go ;)
Date: 5/4/2017 12:50:00 PM
I hope your day is going better :) A sip of coffee and a little sunshine and tell that bed where to go! ;) Your narrative is fun- a topic that perhaps didn't start out that way <3
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Darren White
Date: 5/4/2017 1:11:00 PM
Well, this is the third in a fun series about being in mental hospital. They are meant to be read and hopefully laughed at, at least that is my intention. Thanks dear friend <3
Date: 5/4/2017 12:12:00 PM
A very strong poem! Thank you for commenting on my Economical War! Getting out of bed is always a challenge but its well worth it!
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Darren White
Date: 5/4/2017 12:19:00 PM
Robert, thank you for visiting and commenting. Happy you like my poem :)
Date: 5/4/2017 11:31:00 AM
The bed wants you all for itself...I don't blame it.
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Darren White
Date: 5/4/2017 11:36:00 AM
If you want that bed, Tim, you can have it, but make sure you can free yourself in the morning ;)
Date: 5/4/2017 10:56:00 AM
This was very cool Darren. What a way to start the day. Did you ever think that the bed just enjoys your company because it doesn't like being alone and the door was just jealous????? Hmmm, could be. :) A fun one my friend.
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Darren White
Date: 5/4/2017 11:33:00 AM
ahahaha, you never have aproblem to come up with a clever reply, do you :D
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Chris Green
Date: 5/4/2017 11:01:00 AM
Maybe you are right because my bed sets me free every morning and I always seem to end up back in it that night. :)
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Darren White
Date: 5/4/2017 11:00:00 AM
If you truly love someone my friend, you let them free and they'll voluntarily come to you ;) Thanks Chris!

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