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A Fairytale

Dreamland awaits you, Close your eyes, Imagine you and I, Close as breath, Skin upon skin, Lips touching, For you taste of Raspberries, sweetly irresistible, The fragrance of you, Takes my breath away, I am burning inside, A torch of fire, Burning fuel of passion, For you are my desire, My heart beats with every breath, You are my destiny, Your eyes evade me, deep, dark, mysterious, I am your slave, Your love has captured me, Grab my body, Pull me close, Show me your love, In ways I could only dream. Wake me I must be dreaming, this is a fairytale.

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Skat A

Date: 3/26/2016 3:12:00 AM

Devin Michaels-Bishop, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT

Devin Michaels-Bishop

Date: 3/24/2016 10:11:00 AM

I would love to get some honest feedback as to what everyone things of this poem. Do you think I need to make any adjustments? I'm new to writing poetry. I really don't have any understanding of what sort of forms I should try to write in. I write poems as they come out of my mind, which I'm sure isn't the right way. I really just need some honest feedback. Thank you so much in advance.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/24/2016 12:20:00 AM

Devin, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@

Devin Michaels-Bishop
Date: 3/24/2016 10:15:00 AM

Thank Linda, I really do appreciate the warm welcome. As far as my poetic skills, honestly I don't have any. I'm what you would call a newbie to all this. When I write my poems, I write them as they come out of my brain. I'm sure that's not the proper way, but I don't really know how else to do it.