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I am standing outside in the gloomy hues of twilight, A forsaken and lonesome girl, detached and apart; Swirling and whirling the clouds are a beautiful sight, Dark shadows are mingling in this dreaming sad heart. And a gentle breeze is caressing my long dark tresses, Night wraps his arms around me like a thick dark cloak; We are dancing and twirling and my soul he possesses, I am shrouded in secrets that drip, I just seem to float. A cool breeze pulls at my hair like a desperate lover, Night is a riddle, a puzzle and a mystery deeply spiritual, Shadows all misty slithering and creeping for this dreamer, And soon all loneliness fades and this girl is left peaceful. ___________________________ November 3, 2015 Rhyme Submitted to the Screwed VIII Contest, sponsor, Rob Carmack First Place

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Date: 12/4/2015 5:40:00 PM
Constance, I love the imagery, metaphors and analogies. My favorite line is "Night wraps his arms around me like a thick dark cloak". Beautiful! Congrats on your 1st place win! Love, Kim
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Date: 12/4/2015 6:29:00 PM
Kim, thanks for that nice comment and the congrats ~
Date: 12/4/2015 4:14:00 AM
Congrats on top podium broken...hard to believe it got screwed earlier //
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Date: 12/4/2015 6:30:00 PM
Upma, thanks so much for the congrats, yes, it was a bit upsetting ~
Date: 12/4/2015 1:02:00 AM
Congratulations on your great placement Constance. A lovely piece!
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Date: 12/4/2015 6:30:00 PM
Connie, thanks for the lovely and the congratulations ~
Date: 12/4/2015 12:30:00 AM
Simply beautiful.
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Date: 12/4/2015 6:31:00 PM
Scott, I love that word beautiful, thanks ~
Date: 12/3/2015 12:47:00 PM
Congratulations of the placement of the contest.
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Date: 12/3/2015 2:35:00 PM
Nayda, thanks so much for the congratulations ~
Date: 12/3/2015 11:13:00 AM
Broken, Congratulations on your Screwed VIII WIN... Luv **SKAT**
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Date: 12/3/2015 2:36:00 PM
Thank you Skat
Date: 12/3/2015 10:59:00 AM
You got your reward now - congrats on your well deserved win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 12/3/2015 2:37:00 PM
Jan, thanks so much for the congrats, goes to show never give up on your poem ~
Date: 12/3/2015 9:13:00 AM
Forgot the 7, here it is.
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Date: 12/3/2015 9:56:00 AM
oh, thanks for the 7!!!
Date: 12/3/2015 8:09:00 AM
Congratulations on your First Place win, Broken Wings. So glad to see your beautiful poem finally receive the honor it deserves. 7, Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 12/3/2015 9:56:00 AM
Sandra, thanks so much for the beautiful and the congrats, I am over the moon happy at the moment !
Date: 11/16/2015 12:18:00 AM
Broken, Congratulations on your Shadows at Night win. Love **SKAT**
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Date: 12/3/2015 9:57:00 AM
it was only an HM !
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Date: 11/16/2015 9:47:00 AM
Thank you ~
Date: 11/16/2015 12:17:00 AM
Congratulations Constance!!!
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Date: 12/3/2015 9:57:00 AM
it was an HM !!
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Date: 11/16/2015 9:48:00 AM
Michael, thanks so much for visiting ~
Date: 11/15/2015 11:04:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Broken Wing! Hugs Eve
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Date: 12/3/2015 11:12:00 AM
An Horable mention means a lot to me at least it got looked at in which so many don't! Your work is always outstanding to me :)
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Constance La France
Date: 12/3/2015 9:58:00 AM
just an hm eve, so sad
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Date: 11/16/2015 12:15:00 AM
Thanks for visiting Eve ~
Date: 11/15/2015 9:26:00 PM
Congrats on your win my friend. Silky smooth and a pleasure to read!!
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Date: 12/3/2015 9:58:00 AM
a sad little HM
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Date: 11/16/2015 12:16:00 AM
Thanks for visiting Robert ~
Date: 11/15/2015 8:23:00 PM
Congrats on your win Broken Wings!! *smiles* -LU :)
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Date: 12/3/2015 9:59:00 AM
just an HM though
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Date: 11/15/2015 8:36:00 PM
Thanks for visiting Laura ~
Date: 11/15/2015 5:12:00 PM
this was fantastic, Constance. You got the imagery and personification as Jan says overflowing!!! Congrats.
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Date: 12/3/2015 9:59:00 AM
I only got an HM though
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Date: 11/15/2015 7:04:00 PM
Thanks for visiting, Andrea ~
Date: 11/15/2015 2:24:00 PM
wonderful imagery and personification congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx7
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Date: 12/3/2015 10:00:00 AM
Hm sadness
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Date: 11/15/2015 7:04:00 PM
Thanks for visiting Jan ~
Date: 11/15/2015 2:07:00 PM
a lovely poem Connie congrats on placing hugs soup mail
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Date: 11/15/2015 7:05:00 PM
Thanks for the compliment ~
Date: 11/4/2015 8:09:00 PM
Great write. I really enjoyed this.
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Constance La France
Date: 11/4/2015 11:41:00 PM
Thanks James
Date: 11/4/2015 9:25:00 AM
nice creation... liked it...
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Date: 11/4/2015 1:07:00 PM
Thank you so much for visiting ~

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