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I be a common salty once, no captain's bars, did bear, Yet blessed was I to venture where few a skipper dared. From steadfast crow's high perch I watched the bright coast beacons wink, Through a biting spray's December gale, what goring shoals could sink. For countless days I rocked atop an oaken spar at length, As wake and skies conveyed my eyes, Lord Neptune's sullen strength. Busy dogs, the mates and jacks, bent hard to tasks below, While toward the sky, with glass to eye, my post waved to-and-fro. First was I to e'er spot land, my voice, the first to yell, Aye, first to sight the skull and bone and raise the warning bell. "Thar she blows!" was oft' my cry, if spied a breach, had I, And "Friend or foe?!?" the question barked, if strange sails split the sky. But the moments that becalmed my soul as swells ticked off my time, Were star-filled nights, a bullion moon, and the phosphorescent brine. The darkest times were battlements, when the ship groaned in its might, But never dark, the eventide, sea and sky awash with light! Quite rare, it was, to find this tar on deck or down below, And rarer still, did I abdicate my nest there in the crow. Well, I'm adrift on shore now, with brittle bones and gray, Yet, my lubber's mind still climbs the mast, to man my post and sway. I bounce wee kin on knobby knees, and tell them swabbie tales. Of St. Elmo's Fire and scorching skies, of picaroons and whales. And when the angels task me to a new and heav'nly crow, I'll bend my gaze to the looking glass, and give a hearty "Tally-ho!"

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Date: 6/6/2020 10:42:00 PM
Like any great writer, you lend an air of authenticity to everything you write. This maritime "autobiography" is a case in point; too many phrases to mention in a comment box, but they just keep rolling off your pen. Faves are "common salty", "Lord Neptune's sullen strength", "swells ticked off my time", and "a bullion moon and phosphorescent brine". This must have taken you hours to pen, and was clearly a labor of love and devotion. Greatly enjoyed this, Bard. Blessings, Long John
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/12/2020 1:02:00 AM
(2) A student at U of Arizona almost got expelled because he used this as his own for a final exam - his prof contacted me and asked about it. He had to apologize in writing and on the phone, (and was punished other ways), but I made sure he was NOT expelled ... that would have been awful. I'm told plagiarism is the ultimate compliment! ;o)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/12/2020 1:01:00 AM
Oh, thank you so much, John! This is one of my very favorites ... I can't remember the time involved, but it seemed to pass quickly, as the ink just flowed so smoothly! This was one of "those" where you just get in a zone, and it all comes like magic - I tend to think those pieces come from above, and we are just the tool. Either way, it's a joyous process, and I'm so pleased you like this one, Brother - it is very special!
Date: 6/6/2020 8:36:00 AM
I see your poetry is still not being commented upon as much as it deserves, although read by many. Your vocabulary choices are beyond the scope of most, but worth discovering your intent. Comparing the moon to bullions of gold or silver, and calling a harpoon by it's other name...a pickaroon, gives so much more depth to your lines. Oh, to have been a tar, raised to the height of a crow's nest would've been a wonderful place from which to observe the stars and aurora's dancing fire! Fine work!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/6/2020 6:49:00 PM
Thank you so very kindly, Lin, this means a lot to me, as your opinion is a valued one. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this one as it was a labor of love and something I did with complete joy and positive self-expression. I think these pieces that come with such fluidity are from above, and it's such a blessing to be used as His tool ... to be in that flow is such a rare and beautiful feeling ... this was certainly one of those, and the first of that ilk, as I recall. Thank you for recognizing its special qualities - you are one of a rare talent who would notice such things, and it means everything. :o) <3

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