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For the Carnival Nights Contest of Robert James Liguori

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Premiere Contest WinnerA Carnival Night of First Love

On a warm summer evening we are pinned together on the octopus ride, twirling with excited pleasure. Even the breeze we swirl through cannot cool us down, for the passion of new love consumes us. We browse along the Midway, and he buys for me spun sugar on a stick. Later we sit buckled in on the seat of a huge lit-up ferris wheel. It circles round and round as we swing our legs while surveying the bustling gleeful folk below. I shiver with a fever of anticipation. At the pinnacle of our last go-around on this gigantic wheel, the ride hovers there in the cooling night air. The stars above us seem to be dancing with delight. He leans over and his lips meet mine. I taste the sweetness of cotton candy and melt into our first kiss, never wanting again to come back down to earth.
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Famuyiwa Avatar
September 5, 2025 at 10:17 AM
Glad you are back down to earth, otherwise, I wouldn’t have had the opportunity to have you as a good friend, dear Andrea...lol.
Liguori Avatar
August 16, 2025 at 5:36 PM
A dazzling stream of delightful prose. You rock. Enjoy your trophy!
Guptar Avatar
August 14, 2025 at 11:00 AM
Congratulations, dear poetess on your top win in this contest with a very romantic poem on the prompt of a carnival night. It is a night ever to remember. Wishing you a cheerful weekend.
Sinha-Roy Avatar
August 12, 2025 at 11:15 PM
Congratulations, Andrea.
Crandall Avatar
August 11, 2025 at 4:17 PM
What a delightful well-described memory if this is real, and what a nice creation if it is made up. Reminds me of a certain evening on the Santa Monica pier about 40 years ago - oh well, that's another story.
Muuo  Avatar
August 11, 2025 at 10:16 AM
Wow! Sensational~
Ashley Avatar
August 11, 2025 at 5:44 AM
Dear Andrea, your beautiful atmospheric and emotional imagery brings the thrills of a carnival night with a new love interest to zesty life. Your last few lines of the first kiss creates an amazing finale. Exquisite! Congratulations for your golden trophy win. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Godwin Avatar
August 11, 2025 at 5:41 AM
And you think FV isn't your gig - WRONG. I wanted to be you in this poem, even when the seat was rocking on the ferris wheel which I don't like. Congratulations, free verse trophy girl. Love you ... CayCay
George Avatar
August 11, 2025 at 5:09 AM
You must have certainly wanted the time to stay still. Congratulations on your trophy win, dear Andrea.
Radice Avatar
August 9, 2025 at 11:50 PM
Hi Andrea. You write sensual very well. VERY well. Love how the melting cotton candy comes into play with your words and the clever 'never wanting again to come back down to earth' :) PS Here's a few factoids about Cotton Candy: In the UK is called Candy Floss and in France it's called barbe à papa, which translates to "daddy's beard'. How's that for putting a dampner on any seductive scene that involves spun sugar?! :) I digress. Great work. Cheers - Gary
Godwin Avatar
August 11, 2025 at 5:46 AM
Very interesting but, yes, who wants to be kissy romantic with Candy Floss and/or daddy's beard? Sad truth is, you name it, there's someone who's excited about it. CayCay
Dietrich Avatar
August 10, 2025 at 10:06 AM
thanks so much, Gary. I have lots of "sensual" or romantic poems. Hmmm, I think I much prefer Anericans' terms for cotton candy!
George Avatar
August 2, 2025 at 10:20 PM
Indeed it must have been a magical experience to be together on a Ferris wheel, sucking cotton candy and exchanging a hot kiss. A moment in time you wished to have it perpetuated. Lovely composition, dear Andrea.
Dietrich Avatar
August 4, 2025 at 1:29 AM
Not a true story but in another setting was a similar event
Hind Avatar
July 30, 2025 at 9:54 PM
Enchanting. A magical ride - :)
DiMino Avatar
July 30, 2025 at 10:11 AM
Very beautiful, romantic! You just set fire to the carnival. Here comes the horse drawn wagon, with water filled balloons. Enjoyed very much.
Rodrigues Avatar
July 29, 2025 at 11:07 AM
Your writing is on fire! A fave!
Dietrich Avatar
July 29, 2025 at 12:43 PM
wow, thanks, Kim. It's what comes of being given interesting challenges here!
Narain Avatar
July 29, 2025 at 10:45 AM
Must be a romanticride. Nice poem.
Dietrich Avatar
July 29, 2025 at 10:52 AM
ha. For sure
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