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A Baby Wails

stained water flows
a form bursts forth of life’s flood
a baby wails

For Contest: Haiku vs. Senryu
For and in honor of Charles Henderson

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Constance La France

Date: 2/19/2011 6:14:00 AM

This poem it just so beautiful, in 3 short lines, you described the miracle of birth and congratulations on your win, very well deserved indeed~~

Deb Radke

Date: 1/26/2011 8:01:00 PM

I love this haiku. I read it earlier before the contest was judged, and loved it then. I love it more now. Especially your second line. Congratulations on your winning placement in the contest. Very deserved. Love, Deb

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 1/25/2011 4:20:00 AM

Congratulations John, for the win in Charles Henderson's contest "haiku vs senyru". Love, Carol

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/24/2011 10:26:00 PM

Very interesting haiku, john. And congratulations on your big win! LUv, Andrea

Francine Roberts

Date: 1/24/2011 5:25:00 PM

wonderfu entry, congrats on your win in the contest John

Nette Onclaud

Date: 1/24/2011 10:28:00 AM

oh john.. a supreme piece! CONGRATS on the big win..:) huggs, nette

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/24/2011 9:19:00 AM

So happy to see your poem get its well-deserved recognition, John. Congratulations! Love, Carolyn

Kory Calhoun

Date: 1/24/2011 8:54:00 AM

Hi John - Congratulations on your WIN in the contest. Best wishes, KC

Carrie Richards

Date: 1/24/2011 8:25:00 AM

Such a wonderful metaphor!! Congratulatiions, John!!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 1/24/2011 6:45:00 AM

Congrats Moses on your super win in the haiku vs. senryu contest... awesome win my friend..luv..

Eiken Laan

Date: 1/22/2011 5:40:00 AM

Beautiful John, I had two and this describes the process so well, the pain leaves once that wail is heard, such joy.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/20/2011 8:22:00 PM

A beautiful description of the birthing process, John. Perfect form as Charles requested. Hoping to see your poem in the winners' circle! Love, Carolyn

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 1/20/2011 8:33:00 AM

A birth is always a winner to me. A beautiful Haiku. Good luck on the contest. God Bless Phyl

Deb Radke

Date: 1/20/2011 6:20:00 AM

Beautiful haiku. Not one unnecessary word. And beautiful flow and phrasing. Best wishes in the contest. I expect this will do quite well. Thank you, John, for your recent comments on my writing. I appreciate so much your words of support. I'm glad you liked my haikus. Take care. Deb

Robert Pettit

Date: 1/19/2011 6:57:00 PM

This one looks just as good as any other haiku I have seen lately. Good work here.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/19/2011 5:41:00 PM

Good one..New life should be a winner..Enjoyed..Thanks for stopping by my blog..Chiropractor did my neck and I came home and slept two hours..I have not had a good night's sleep for awhile now..Thanks for stopping by my blog..Sara

John Loving Iii

Date: 1/19/2011 9:25:00 AM

i'll have to look at the rules. and i'll get back. jhl

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 1/19/2011 6:18:00 AM

Awesome .. Moses a perfect picture painted with your precious words my friend.. good luck in the new contest... wonderful title too..

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 1/19/2011 3:12:00 AM

Very creative haiku with very apt nimages, John

Nataliq Georgieva

Date: 1/19/2011 12:43:00 AM

Dear Mr.Freeman , can you my prize in the cotests.. and hol to get it ? Receive congratulations,but it do not know why? Please explain to me ? Thank you for attention ! Lawyer: Natalia Georgieva

Jimmy Anderson

Date: 1/18/2011 9:30:00 PM

Very nice Haiku...Good luck in the contest...Thank you for my win in your contest...Jimmy

Diane Locksley

Date: 1/18/2011 7:43:00 PM

Very creative, John. I think Charles wants a total of 15 syllables in his haiku entries. I wouldn't want you to miss out, so you might want to review his rules. I really like the concept here. Best to you, Diane

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