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CITADEL AND CONSTELLATIONS The green leaves in rugged moans; The tall bushes in rumbling groans; The roofs train creaks-- their fugue blow cobwebs hugging branches below, such are precursors inviting darkness lair for stormy clouds before crowd the days. Yellow horizon seem unreachable honey as in my life's ocean, balloon billows I bear. I-- surged in every swell to skirt yet still lashing waves dashed pushing me sometimes to despair. Again, cataclysm walk unheralded casting loose my arms lift upon the glimmer of silver lining from afar somber shadows enshrouded me in a mist of struggles. Ounce of strength I have, I try to juggle and juggle yet, curses fell from hearts and lips parched of love. All these came, one and all -- the flowing light has flickered flash and gone but beyond all these you stood -- my sentinel... You hushed the bad constellations hanging 'round my world like a lighthouse guiding a lost ship to his home. Yes! You are my beacon, a promontory amidst cyclic onslaught brambles and chameleons, a rock to cling in the wind's creeping fury, Staunch and firm, my ñhero fighting the torrential cascade of tirades and reproaches: MY CITADEL. . . _____________________________________________________________________ ***Sponsor Shadow Hamilton Contest Name Your Favourite Old Poem #2 ++Placed 2nd++ ***Sponsor Justin Bordner Contest Name How You Make The Stars Hush ++Placed2nd++ ©O.E. Guillermo 06:37 pm, February 24, 2015

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Date: 6/11/2015 4:14:00 PM
OLIVE, :-) Congratulations with your wonderful win! *SKAT*
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Date: 6/14/2015 1:06:00 AM
thank you so much SKat.. :)!
Date: 6/11/2015 8:26:00 AM
I enjoyed your winning poem. Congrats!
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Date: 6/14/2015 1:04:00 AM
thanks muhcRIchard! :D!
Date: 3/17/2015 12:48:00 AM
Breathlessly beautiful, lovely and sweet, my dear kabayan. Congratulations on your well-deserved win! Mabuhay! :)
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Date: 6/9/2015 5:43:00 AM
Kim, thank you so much for your continuous support and comment.. =') God bless us all..
Date: 3/15/2015 8:49:00 PM
To have a heart that you can rely on...to place your heart into the hands of someone who will love you just as much for your pain as well as for your beauty and brilliance, that's a hope of love we all seek, and which you have expressed with agile affection, honesty, and exquisite word use..."Yes, your are my beacon, a promontory amidst the cyclic onslaught of brambles and chameleons..." that's beautiful companionship Olive...J.A.B. A FAV!!!
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Date: 6/9/2015 5:41:00 AM
Justin, I just know that when I wrote this poem I was so inspired.. =') thank you for considering it a worthy winner.. =')
Date: 3/14/2015 7:03:00 AM
Wow Olive a real captivating write here,, congrats on top place win!
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Date: 3/17/2015 8:29:00 AM
Thanks much Dr. Upma.. :)! thanks you for your captivating comment. :)
Date: 3/13/2015 7:28:00 PM
Congratulations, Olive, on your well-deserved podium win for this beautiful and inspiring poem. Love your last stanza in particular! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 3/17/2015 6:06:00 AM
Thanks much Sandra.. :)! I 'm glad you enjoyed my poem.. :) And yes I love most the last stanza too.. :)!
Date: 3/13/2015 7:13:00 PM
"as in my life's ocean, balloon billows I bear." Such a great line and you have many original concepts throughout. A lovely poem! Thanks for sharing and congrats on your placement!Always,~Laura
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Date: 3/16/2015 9:05:00 AM
Thanks much LAura.. :)! I appreciate your drop by.. :)!
Date: 3/13/2015 1:53:00 PM
Wonderful use of vocabulary! Congratulations on your winning verse. Light & Love
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Date: 3/16/2015 9:00:00 AM
Thanks much Debbie.. :) Sometimes I want to dig in more to bring about certain things to be describe the way i want it too.. :) and I am always told to show and not to tell. :)!
Date: 3/13/2015 8:46:00 AM
The imagery is incredible Olive - the final stanza is wonderful you have found your citadel - your rock:-) Hugs Jan xx many congrats on your high placement:-) Hugs Jan xxx 7 xxx
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Date: 3/16/2015 8:58:00 AM
weeee it's been my long prayer and dream to have a person who can be my rock and citadel.. :)! weee thanks much.. hugs back.. :D
Date: 3/3/2015 9:09:00 AM
This is very beautiful and inspiring, Olive_eloi. Lovely imagery and sounds. A strong and 'faithful' final stanza. Top marks! hugs // paul
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Date: 3/5/2015 3:05:00 AM
thanks much PAul.. :) I always like reading your comments.. :)! hugs and hugs!!! :D
Date: 3/1/2015 3:19:00 PM
Another wonderful poem Olive, an absolute joy to read this Sunday evening, hugs, James xx
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Date: 3/5/2015 3:04:00 AM
thanks much DIno James.. :) so like you liking my poems.. :)! hugs!
Date: 2/27/2015 2:29:00 PM
An incredible citadel; quite a warm and honest poem.
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Date: 3/3/2015 3:12:00 AM
thanks much M. L. Kiser.. :) So appreciate you stopping by..
Date: 2/26/2015 8:44:00 AM
I love the imagery and feelings in the poem Olive. It flows beautifully with some wonderful alliteration.
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Date: 3/2/2015 7:07:00 AM
thanks much David.. :) I so appreciate your comment. :)
Date: 2/25/2015 6:39:00 AM
Excellent. Very inspiring write. Enjoyed reading it. Tfs
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Date: 2/26/2015 9:35:00 AM
thanks much Ravi.. your visits are always a boost!
Date: 2/24/2015 10:32:00 AM
What wonderful inspiring poetry this is..amazingly visual, and so profound as the truth lingers in one's thoughts when reading this
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Date: 2/25/2015 8:38:00 AM
thanks much Harry for taking the time to drop your feedback,. :)! I hope it will please the judge though. :)!

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