Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Poet Narrative

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Citadel and Constellations

CITADEL AND CONSTELLATIONS


The green leaves in rugged moans;
The tall bushes in rumbling groans;
The roofs train creaks-- their fugue
blow cobwebs hugging branches below,
such  are precursors inviting darkness lair

for  stormy   clouds   before   crowd  the  days.
Yellow horizon seem unreachable honey
as in my life's ocean, balloon  billows  I   bear.
I-- surged in every swell to skirt  yet   still
lashing waves dashed pushing me sometimes to despair.

Again, cataclysm walk unheralded casting loose
my arms lift upon the glimmer of silver lining from afar
somber shadows enshrouded me in a mist of struggles.
Ounce of strength I have, I try to juggle and juggle
yet, curses fell from hearts and lips parched of love.

All   these    came,   one    and    all --
the flowing light has flickered flash and gone
but beyond all these you stood -- my sentinel...
You hushed the bad constellations hanging 'round my world
like a lighthouse guiding a lost ship to his home.

Yes! You are my beacon, a promontory amidst
cyclic onslaught brambles and chameleons,
a rock  to cling in the wind's creeping fury,
Staunch and firm,  my ñhero fighting the torrential
cascade of tirades and reproaches:  MY CITADEL. . . 
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***Sponsor	Shadow Hamilton
Contest Name	Your Favourite Old Poem #2 
++Placed 2nd++

***Sponsor	Justin Bordner
Contest Name	How You Make The Stars Hush 
++Placed2nd++

©O.E. Guillermo
06:37 pm, February 24, 2015

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Skat A June 11, 2015 at 4:14 PM OLIVE, :-) Congratulations with your wonderful win! *SKAT* Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 14, 2015 at 1:06 AM thank you so much SKat.. :)!

Richard Lamoureux June 11, 2015 at 8:26 AM I enjoyed your winning poem. Congrats! Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 14, 2015 at 1:04 AM thanks muhcRIchard! :D!

Kp Nunez March 17, 2015 at 12:48 AM Breathlessly beautiful, lovely and sweet, my dear kabayan. Congratulations on your well-deserved win! Mabuhay! :) Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 9, 2015 at 5:43 AM Kim, thank you so much for your continuous support and comment.. =') God bless us all..

Justin Bordner March 15, 2015 at 8:49 PM To have a heart that you can rely on...to place your heart into the hands of someone who will love you just as much for your pain as well as for your beauty and brilliance, that's a hope of love we all seek, and which you have expressed with agile affection, honesty, and exquisite word use..."Yes, your are my beacon, a promontory amidst the cyclic onslaught of brambles and chameleons..." that's beautiful companionship Olive...J.A.B. A FAV!!! Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 9, 2015 at 5:41 AM Justin, I just know that when I wrote this poem I was so inspired.. =') thank you for considering it a worthy winner.. =')

Dr. Upma A. Sharma March 14, 2015 at 7:03 AM Wow Olive a real captivating write here,, congrats on top place win! Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser March 17, 2015 at 8:29 AM Thanks much Dr. Upma.. :)! thanks you for your captivating comment. :)

Sandra Haight March 13, 2015 at 7:28 PM Congratulations, Olive, on your well-deserved podium win for this beautiful and inspiring poem. Love your last stanza in particular! Hugs, Sandra Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser March 17, 2015 at 6:06 AM Thanks much Sandra.. :)! I 'm glad you enjoyed my poem.. :) And yes I love most the last stanza too.. :)!

Laura Breidenthal March 13, 2015 at 7:13 PM "as in my life's ocean, balloon billows I bear." Such a great line and you have many original concepts throughout. A lovely poem! Thanks for sharing and congrats on your placement!Always,~Laura Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser March 16, 2015 at 9:05 AM Thanks much LAura.. :)! I appreciate your drop by.. :)!

Debbie Guzzi March 13, 2015 at 1:53 PM Wonderful use of vocabulary! Congratulations on your winning verse. Light & Love Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser March 16, 2015 at 9:00 AM Thanks much Debbie.. :) Sometimes I want to dig in more to bring about certain things to be describe the way i want it too.. :) and I am always told to show and not to tell. :)!

Jan Allison March 13, 2015 at 8:46 AM The imagery is incredible Olive - the final stanza is wonderful you have found your citadel - your rock:-) Hugs Jan xx many congrats on your high placement:-) Hugs Jan xxx 7 xxx Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser March 16, 2015 at 8:58 AM weeee it's been my long prayer and dream to have a person who can be my rock and citadel.. :)! weee thanks much.. hugs back.. :D

Paul Callus March 3, 2015 at 9:09 AM This is very beautiful and inspiring, Olive_eloi. Lovely imagery and sounds. A strong and 'faithful' final stanza. Top marks! hugs // paul Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser March 5, 2015 at 3:05 AM thanks much PAul.. :) I always like reading your comments.. :)! hugs and hugs!!! :D

James Fraser March 1, 2015 at 3:19 PM Another wonderful poem Olive, an absolute joy to read this Sunday evening, hugs, James xx Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser March 5, 2015 at 3:04 AM thanks much DIno James.. :) so like you liking my poems.. :)! hugs!

M. L. Kiser February 27, 2015 at 2:29 PM An incredible citadel; quite a warm and honest poem. Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser March 3, 2015 at 3:12 AM thanks much M. L. Kiser.. :) So appreciate you stopping by..

David Furlong February 26, 2015 at 8:44 AM I love the imagery and feelings in the poem Olive. It flows beautifully with some wonderful alliteration. Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser March 2, 2015 at 7:07 AM thanks much David.. :) I so appreciate your comment. :)

Ravi Sathasivam February 25, 2015 at 6:39 AM Excellent. Very inspiring write. Enjoyed reading it. Tfs Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser February 26, 2015 at 9:35 AM thanks much Ravi.. your visits are always a boost!

Harry Horsman February 24, 2015 at 10:32 AM What wonderful inspiring poetry this is..amazingly visual, and so profound as the truth lingers in one's thoughts when reading this Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser February 25, 2015 at 8:38 AM thanks much Harry for taking the time to drop your feedback,. :)! I hope it will please the judge though. :)!