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Black Smoke Rising

His boots are trekking through a foreign land Rifle ready to deliver death.... But it's his blood that stains the desert sand And it's there he draws his final breath Bullets fly along a lonely desert road As soldiers fight hard to survive Another IED explodes Causing more to lose their lives As the battle rages on They radio for air support Soon their enemies will be gone Blown away in war's distort In a town not far away They see black smoke rise The town is now a ruin of gray As jets go roaring cross the sky Dead bodies are strewn on the ground As they look on with merciless eyes Death echoes all around As they hear the children cry 5/21/17

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Date: 7/23/2017 7:37:00 AM
Very powerful this is Joseph. You have shown it well and it fully reaches the reader.
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Date: 6/4/2017 2:22:00 PM
Wow Joseph, this is written with such realism it had me tearing up. We have to find a better way than war. I was very moved by this excellent entry and I hope it gets top rewards. : )
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Date: 5/24/2017 1:59:00 AM
A powerful piece, Joseph. The black smoke is particularly ominous. Well written! Good luck with the contest. Regards, John.
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Date: 5/23/2017 12:51:00 PM
Joseph, you vividly describe war and its victims, including children. Of course, as always, peace is the biggest victim. // paul
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Date: 5/23/2017 3:32:00 AM
- A sad truth, great written Joseph - Good luck in the contest - Have a lovely day - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/21/2017 6:16:00 PM
This one has quite an impact, Joseph. Very well done. I wonder if we can submit oldies. I just thought of one I Have on the war. I hope yours scores!!
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Date: 5/21/2017 3:46:00 PM
wow Joseph, this is powerful writing on a never ending scene, that seems to play over and over, very vivid imagery! Look forward to when there will be no more war!
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Date: 5/21/2017 2:22:00 PM
A war scene well done, Joseph, good luck in the contest. ~*
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Date: 5/21/2017 10:57:00 AM
The ravages of war are never ending it seems. A sad state of the human kind. Well written Joseph
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Date: 5/21/2017 10:56:00 AM
your vivid imagery from start to finish sent shivers down my spine Joseph:-( hugs Jan xx7
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