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Today’s wind shifts too fast like a muddle of invisible lint…perhaps dust,as the air resists this heart's unanswered questions howling about this litany of a crushed promise: Wired thoughts rip my lily bouquet now strewn the ground of lament; an aborted vow silencing chapel aisles on this day, this day. I turn celibate much like a nun in front of an altar… forsaken ,that my pain grates a most benevolent night that has no syllable for me…for on this day, a betrothal undone leaves me hanging , hanging on a cross. I’ll never know the why of a turnaround choice; except in his runaway scheme ,my eyes grow blank…nipped iodized entombed. It is freezing now; a light bent in prayer disappears with and lost in the winds. John Hamilton's Contest: Lost Love Free Verse or Rhyme Resubmitted 5/12/2017

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Date: 5/15/2017 6:28:00 AM
To be left at the alter must be a horror come to life. Congratulations on your wonderful win Nette! : ) 7
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Date: 5/13/2017 6:40:00 PM
Congrats!!! nette...very well done my friend...all the best...^WW^
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Date: 1/22/2016 11:42:00 PM
NETTE, congratulations on your win!!! XOX ~LINDA~
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Date: 1/17/2016 11:37:00 AM
I've heard stories how one partner does not participate in the planning of a wedding. There should be as much cooperation and knowing heard of time. Even still, it is possible for one to run away at the last minute. Perhaps the union was too scary for some reason. Nevertheless, a crushing blow. Very painfully described. Ugh!
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Date: 1/12/2016 11:26:00 PM
Nette,, awesome win... :) SKAT
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Date: 1/12/2016 8:00:00 AM
Congratulations Nette on winning in the Free Verse Extravaganza contest! -Hans :)
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Date: 1/12/2016 3:33:00 AM
Heartbreaking
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Date: 1/12/2016 3:15:00 AM
Wonderful poetry here nette.. congrats on much deserved win.. big congrats!
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Date: 1/11/2016 10:29:00 PM
Hi Nette. Worthy POTD...way to go...huggs
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Date: 1/11/2016 9:16:00 PM
Hi Nette, dropping by with congratulations on your POTD. Well deserved it is too after reading this excellent poem. One can feel the emotion throughout this write. The words touch deep. Congratulations once more....Vladislav. A definite 7
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Date: 1/11/2016 8:59:00 PM
Congratulations on POTD!
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Date: 1/11/2016 7:51:00 PM
Nette, congratulations for the POTD. Verlena
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Date: 1/11/2016 5:28:00 PM
many congrats on your win and POTD:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 1/11/2016 2:40:00 PM
- Congratulations on your p.o.t.d. Nette :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 1/11/2016 2:33:00 PM
You have written a free verse that captures the very essence of the picture dear Nette. Many congrats on your win. Lainie
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Date: 1/11/2016 2:17:00 PM
Hi Nette, congratulations on your poem chosen Poem of the Day! Also, for you placement in the Free Verse Extravaganza contest! Sad poem beautifully written! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 1/11/2016 1:19:00 PM
Nette, congrats on your placement! A wonderful emotive write :)-*smiles*-luloo
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Date: 1/11/2016 10:59:00 AM
Nette, Congratulations on getting the poem of the day it was well deserved.Enjoy the honor-Alexis 7
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Date: 1/11/2016 7:36:00 AM
Hi nette: I feel the cold from your beautiful poem. I wish you well in the contest.
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Date: 1/11/2016 7:24:00 AM
A true poem coming from the heart...very well written!!
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Date: 1/11/2016 6:04:00 AM
“Today’s wind shifts too fast like a muddle of invisible lint…perhaps dust, as the air resists this heart's unanswered questions howling about this litany of a crushed promise"…WOW Nette, what an opening to a stylish and elegantly written heart-breaker...Hands down 1st place winner in my humble opinion - Tim
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Date: 1/11/2016 12:28:00 AM
Wow...again an absolutely sensational write, Nette! Each line takes me to a more awesome image...this is poetry with great performance possibilities...loved the "night with no syllable". Last stanza contains some of the most poignantly beautiful lines I have read in this contest capped by THAT stunning last line. Podium winner! 7 and fav. hugs!
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Date: 1/10/2016 5:38:00 PM
Such a sad poem you have written..One I hope came from the skill of the writer..
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Date: 1/10/2016 3:43:00 PM
The total devastation of a broken promise really comes to life as you slay me with searing images yet written with subtly. Stunning poem from choice poet!
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Date: 1/10/2016 3:03:00 PM
- It must be a big nightmare !!! - Great written, luck in contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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