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He was good to you when d e s p e r a t i o n held your hungry hand, ...when the sky fell in on... your grieving head, he married you, gave you all he had ,yet like a female praying mantis without regard for my brother, you consumed him! 8-18-16 Contest, Praying Mantis for Anthony Slausen

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Joseph May

Date: 9/17/2016 9:51:00 PM

A poignant write Connie....Congrats on your win

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 9/17/2016 10:09:00 PM

Thank you very much Joseph. I am very happy to have made the list. ; )

Janis Thompson

Date: 9/17/2016 1:10:00 PM

Deeply moving etheree. Congratulations on your placement.

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 9/17/2016 3:55:00 PM

Thank you very much Janis. ; )

John Lawless

Date: 9/17/2016 12:36:00 PM

A sad metaphorical twist in this lovely Etheree Connie. It is sad that so many are consumed by their mates insatiability. Congrats on your placement in this contest

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 9/17/2016 4:02:00 PM

Thank you very much, as you know, I loved yours. ; )

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/17/2016 12:18:00 PM

Alas! A great write! Congrats!

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 9/17/2016 4:03:00 PM

Thank you Kim! : )

Sandra Haight

Date: 9/17/2016 11:45:00 AM

An amazing metaphor in your 'mantis' poem, Connie! Congratulations on your fine placement on this Premiere Contest's short list of winners! 7 Hugs, Sandra

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 9/17/2016 4:07:00 PM

I felt more comfortable writing a metaphor than writing about the insect itself Sandra, though I know we have them here in Hawaii because I got a visit from one in the morning. They move slow enough that I am not afraid of them. They are kind of cute! Thank you very much. : )

Vladislav Raven

Date: 8/20/2016 3:04:00 PM

Hi Connie, an excellent metaphorical write for the contest. I do hope this one does well for you.It is sad the way people can act. As Nicola says people often consume those closest to them. Why we have to be that way beats me. I have never seen a praying Mantis live, so to speak. This write should do well Connie, reads like an absolute winner, but i am not the judge. Anyway, wishing you well in the contest once again. Hugs....Mike. XX. This is a definite seven and a well written fave.

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 8/20/2016 4:24:00 PM

They are quite cute as insects go Mike. They move slowly, do not jump on you like grasshoppers do. I saw one on my balcony chair one morning. I said hello and it just kept sitting there looking cute. I took it as a good omen. Wish they didn't consume their mates. Thank you so much for your encouraging comments and especially for the fave and 7! Blessings, Connie ; )

Arthur Vaso

Date: 8/19/2016 11:17:00 PM

Hi Connie, I knew the outcome here, and I still loved the poem!!!!!!

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 8/20/2016 2:29:00 PM

Thank you Arthur. It is easy to guess. Gpad you enjoyed it. ; )

Lynn Marie

Date: 8/19/2016 2:38:00 PM

Wonderfully imaginative...A whole lot of "creepy" these "things" are...especially through your very descriptive words...lol Terrific writing, a pleasure to read (and never see one in real life..ever..lol) A 7 :-) My best to you in the contest :-) blessings, lynn

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 8/20/2016 5:19:00 AM

One early morning I rose and went out on our balcony and I found a praying mantis just sitting on our chair. I took it as a good omen. I said hello and then came back inside. It was cute. Thank you Lynn.; )

Winged Warrior

Date: 8/19/2016 9:58:00 AM

A well written Etheree Connie...best of luck in contest...god bless...^WW^

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 8/20/2016 2:39:00 PM

Thank you very much WW. Cheers. ; )

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/19/2016 8:08:00 AM

- Wonderful written to this contest, Connie .... good luck ! - // Anne-Lise :)

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 8/20/2016 2:37:00 PM

Thank you Anne-Lise. Cheers ; )

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 8/19/2016 7:36:00 AM

A truth too many times revealed dear, Connie! Powerful writing! Thunderous message! A 7!

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 8/20/2016 2:34:00 PM

Thank you Demetrios. I agree. I haven't seen my brother in years...we can't find him. : )

Joanna Daniel

Date: 8/19/2016 6:04:00 AM

Subtle comparison:) I like this entry the best:):) Sure to win, Connie:)

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 8/20/2016 2:36:00 PM

Thank you for the suppotive encouragement Jo. : )

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/19/2016 1:20:00 AM

What a great use of personification with this fun insect, Connie. Fun looking but deadly!! Glad to see an etheree from you. I used an oldie I had of a praying mantis. A tiny senryu. probably won't make the list.

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 8/19/2016 2:45:00 AM

I am not sure what he is looking for. I just felt like I could say all I needed to in this Etheree. Thanks Andrea. Best of luck in the contest. You have been on top of so many lists. Congrats on any I may have missed. Hugs, Connie ; )