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I saw your name, I started to smile Turning left now, only two more miles My toes were wiggling, at the thought of you Sipping, squishing, tasting your delight You're disappearing slowly, out of sight Your name is intoxicating, so is your taste You're to be sipped, not gulped down in haste Pulling up, parking, taking out the key Happy are my lips, hips, and ooh-my tummy

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 2/15/2012 8:19:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. This is a decently written poem.
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Date: 2/14/2012 5:40:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Russell's "Tons Of Comma Fun" contest Adrienne. Love, Carol
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Date: 2/13/2012 8:27:00 AM
Great work. Congratulations on your 5th place win in Russell's contest...................S.Ronthorpe
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Date: 2/12/2012 2:16:00 AM
ADRIENNE,, stopping by to wish you a SWEET VALENTINE.. AND A WONDERFUL , congratulations... ON your wonderful win In this awesome contest. Enjoyed ;-) . have yourself a wonderful valentines. @lways & @lways *xox~PD
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Date: 2/11/2012 12:00:00 PM
What a fun piece. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 2/11/2012 8:29:00 AM
Congrats, Adrienne. Excellent piece. Enjoyed. Nice going. Have a great weekend. hugs Ralph
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Date: 2/11/2012 3:29:00 AM
congrats, enjoyed this awesome winner. harry
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Date: 2/10/2012 5:36:00 PM
Very descriptive and expressive work that is in the winners' cirlce..I am glad that I chose this one to read this eve..Congrats on your winning work..Sara
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