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12/21/12

The end of the world what would that be the fall of a star, the rise of the sea? Perhaps, all the better, for other than we, if mankind was dismissed by Higher decree. The fall of a star, the rise of the sea These things have happened before surely. There was a sorting, a winnowing of we, As well as the plants and the animals free. Perhaps, all the better, for other than we The graceful dolphin may they long sortie When the Earth is water they’ll be jamboree. These kind hearted creatures a new Pharisee. If mankind was dismissed by Higher decree Would we all be above and fly fancy-free? No one knows, no matter, we can disagree In the end, the Earth’s fate is not up to we. *Monorhyme layed out in quatrains with the first 4 lines forming the first line of the last 3 groupings of 4.

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Date: 9/12/2010 5:10:00 AM
There will be a change in paridime? can't spell it LOL
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Date: 9/11/2010 7:58:00 PM
if the end is near i say bring it...my fire insurance is paid in full
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Date: 9/1/2010 6:11:00 AM
great words you have mastered here xxx Thank you for your comments ... sarah xxx
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Date: 9/1/2010 5:10:00 AM
Brilliantly composed a beautiful Poem which lefts a creative note on the mind instead of fearing 'the fall of a star, the rise of the sea'. Great write. And many thanks for honoring my Poem in your contest and for your good wishes on my Poem Tree Roots and the Light. Sorry I was away from internet in the last 7-8 days and couldn't acknowledge you earlier. Love and best wishes always....Ravindra....Deborah Guzzi.
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Date: 9/1/2010 4:16:00 AM
Excellent form and very nice creativity. Gave it a 7/7.
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Date: 8/31/2010 8:19:00 PM
Enjoyed your Entry. GooD luck~ SKAt
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Date: 8/31/2010 12:58:00 PM
Hi Deborah!! This sure is a wonderful monorhyme on that "dreaded" date-- I definitely agree with with you are saying here, it's not up to us in the end...sending you soupmail after this :D --nikko :)
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Date: 8/30/2010 8:28:00 PM
why did you block me?jhl
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Date: 8/30/2010 1:19:00 PM
A great read Deborah.Wonder what will happen.Thanks for that kind comment.Teresa
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Date: 8/30/2010 9:47:00 AM
Soup mail returned, Deborah.
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Date: 8/30/2010 8:39:00 AM
Excellent entry, Deb....I think the world would surely be a more peaceful place without man's habitual greed....Dolphins could swim in harmony. (ps....I agree about my last limerick....meter should have been much better...I'll watch more closely next time!) :)
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Date: 8/30/2010 6:12:00 AM
A wonderful entry with this excellent and very creative monorhyme Deb. I love the way your second line is weaved through out stressing its beauty even more.
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Date: 8/29/2010 4:47:00 PM
A very creative write, dear heart, I must try this for myself ~~
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Date: 8/29/2010 4:41:00 PM
Enjoyed your monorhyme very much, enjoyed the repeated lines, very clever ~ Sharon :)
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Date: 8/29/2010 2:35:00 AM
A clever monorhyme, Deb. Loved the flow in this one. I totally agree,' the Earth's fate is not up to we'(geez, I'm starting to talk in rhymes-lol) Good luck in the contest! Emily
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Date: 8/29/2010 2:06:00 AM
You have done a great job creating this poem. I love the flow and rhyme. I like the way you repeated the second line in verse one as the first line in the rest of the verses. "The fall of a star, the rise of the sea" is such a beautiful expression. Very nice. Love you. XOXOX Dane
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Date: 8/28/2010 9:29:00 PM
Hey, an ambitious write here with the monorhyme and all. I loved your message here, Deb! LUv, Andrea
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Date: 8/28/2010 7:16:00 PM
A very cleverly done, Monorhyme on 2012-21-12. I think there were three 000 when 2000 predictions were on. Now it is 1 and 2. Deb
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Date: 8/28/2010 5:08:00 PM
Excellent entry for the contest TEACH.. good luck with this great write.. enjoyed your theories too am sure u did your research..haha..me too.. enjoyed this happy weekend..with luv.. pupil..
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Date: 8/28/2010 4:28:00 PM
Perfect monorhyme entry, Deb. Come what may 12/21/12. Peace, Audrey
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Date: 8/28/2010 1:32:00 PM
a wonderful entry D.G., good luck,, and (p.s.) on my grandpa poem,,lol)..it is a dedication For our SILLY BILLY the kid)).. he let me post it for fun.. no feelings hurt..in the making,,love LeeAnn
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Date: 8/28/2010 11:29:00 AM
that was just beautiful, good lulck in the contest
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Date: 8/28/2010 10:18:00 AM
I can just see the dolphins enjoying the new Earth you described so well in your monorhyme, Deborah. I think they are far wiser than we. Love, Carolyn
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