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-eyelids Sadness-

eyes opened slowly almost like a last farewell tears omnipresent his eyelids closed forever while she still wiped tears away *Missy Nikko's body part of choice "eyelids", I took this one a different route, hopefully she still likes it :)* 14/04/2011

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Susan Mills

Date: 6/10/2011 3:30:00 PM

very sensitive. touching upon eyelids of male and female; what his does forever and what hers does for moments.

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 4/16/2011 7:26:00 AM

A moving write indeed... Reminds me of the last time I saw my sister... This brought a tear... luv Michael

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 4/15/2011 8:29:00 PM

a sad one for sure Wilma. Kind of puts the reader there. Good luck in your contest

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/14/2011 6:40:00 PM

gosh, you are really coming up with awesome writes this way. This one in particular, I really like it.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 4/14/2011 6:05:00 PM

U have met Nikko's challenge with this rare beauty Wilma... that clever girl... and u too.. by the way.. I notified TPS of the incorrect spelling of your name... on home page as new Lifetime Member... so it should be changed properly by tomorrow..luv..

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/14/2011 5:00:00 PM

Good luck in the contest with this impressive in work..Reads like a winner..Sara

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 4/14/2011 12:51:00 PM

oh my gosh-- you got me laughing aloud at almost 4am!! HAHa-gosh I cannot wait what you come up with-- ohh better restrain yourself from fluttering those eyelashes, they are a hazard!! lol hugs missy :D

Kash Poet

Date: 4/14/2011 11:12:00 AM

Very touching Tanka Wilma.---kashinath

James Fraser

Date: 4/14/2011 11:06:00 AM

Heartfelt poetry Wilma, I certainly like it - smiles - thank goodness it's Friday tomorrow. I'm on holiday next week, can't wait. Have a lovely weekend when it comes round....:)

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 4/14/2011 10:17:00 AM

Definitely a different approach this time, Wilma-- and if I may borrow pd's phrase-- a soul dropper :( -- what a very sad yet beautifully done piece missy-- definitely like it-- :) gosh are you still up for some craziness?? maybe you should give me the prompt this time?? ok but if you're not up for it-- here's your next one: sticking with the eyes-- eyelashes :)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/14/2011 8:52:00 AM

Such a touching poem, Wilma. When a loved one's eyes close forever, the one left behind feels deep pain. You and Nikko are doing great writes on these "body parts of choice." I'm sure she'll love it too. Love, Carolyn

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 4/14/2011 6:22:00 AM

Lovely poetic expression on eyelids in different states, Wilma

Anthony Nutter

Date: 4/14/2011 3:27:00 AM

Interesting write and an excellent submission to the contest, best wishes.