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how celebrants will save funerals.

I lost control of the day again ... Staring blindly at my tracks in the sand ... they go lonely He chose to die rather than live If only ... If only ... If only ... All the time it pops up ... why? The world was turned on its head ... He invested everything in a new business a year ago No one starts at the top and it is rarely black or white What went wrong ? Don't judge yourself, my dear - do not pull me away when the crisis strikes Credit, consumer loans and new business which did not go in plus Why didn't you ask for help? - "in good and bad days" we promised each other If only ... If only ... If only ... I knew you struggled with sleep, initiative and appetite You were exhausted, despairing and depressed I tried to use my energy to think positively With the nerves and emotions in full tension - you were not receptive My grief cannot be described my questions never get answers A sense of shock and numbness my daily functioning is impaired There was so much I would say ... Grief has a certain number of tears who must cry If only ... If only ... If only ... - where it is completely dark there are no stars 04/07/2020 Sun :) - A-L Andresen :) Copyright © All Rights Reserved The One that got Away Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Silent One 2nd place in the contest - This is a fictional poem :)

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Date: 7/13/2020 5:04:00 PM
Financial woes are terribly difficult in a relationship. Your outline gives the reason for the hardship. Your business sense is spot on. Monetary security is all part of a relationship, sad to say but it is a real reality. My parents were very wealthy at one time until our country became Communist and they lost it all, they started over again in America. The happy ending is when they were rich they loved each other and when they were poor they also did. Love conquers all situations. Be blessed.
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Date: 7/19/2020 2:43:00 PM
- True love overcomes all - Thank you very much, Michael :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 7/7/2020 2:41:00 PM
I am amazed at your imagination Anne! This is such a heartfelt muse that I thought it was based on real experiences. Congratulations on your win :) Much love!
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Date: 7/19/2020 2:41:00 PM
- Thank you very much, Aditi :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 7/7/2020 1:19:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. A powerful write and two words, "If only." Enjoy your win and day with hugs............
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Date: 7/19/2020 2:41:00 PM
- Thank you very much, Paula :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 7/7/2020 10:27:00 AM
Oh, the power of your words "If only ... If only ... If only ..." This describes the utter heartbreak of the one left behind so poignantly, Anne-Lise. I glad it was not true for you, but I'm sure it is a reality for some... deeply moving, my friend. If only ... If only ... If only ... congratulations for your win. Hugs ~ John
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Date: 7/19/2020 2:40:00 PM
- Thank you very much, John :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 7/7/2020 9:41:00 AM
A great write expressing sorrow, grief and tragedy, Anne Lise! I'm glad to know it is fiction. Congrats! Blessings, Rhonda xx
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Date: 7/19/2020 2:40:00 PM
- Thank you very much, Rhonda :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 7/7/2020 9:17:00 AM
Great last line, sometimes there are no answers and life can be so unfair.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 7/19/2020 2:39:00 PM
- Thank you very much, S.O. :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 7/6/2020 6:54:00 PM
WoW! What a poignant piece this is. Despair is one of the worst sins because it means you have lost your faith. Without faith all hope is lost. If you have no hope you have nothing. Great write. God Bless, JB
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Date: 7/19/2020 2:39:00 PM
- Thank you very much, Judy :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 7/5/2020 11:05:00 AM
"Grief has a certain number of tears" nice line... The emotions were well expressed in this write...
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Date: 7/19/2020 2:38:00 PM
- Thank you very much, Arturo :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 7/4/2020 11:49:00 PM
The wonderful smile on your avatar expertly hides a grieving soul... Heart-rending write, Anne-Lise. Condolences, Gershon
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Date: 7/19/2020 2:37:00 PM
- Thank you very much, Gershon :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 7/4/2020 11:31:00 AM
This pulls so deeply at the heartstrings, Anna-Lise, nicely penned. Best of luck in the contest. Hugs, John
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Date: 7/6/2020 12:01:00 PM
- Many thanks John, for your comments and visits :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 7/4/2020 10:58:00 AM
Such a sad write my dear friend - your poem depicts the turmoil you are going through. Best wish and hugs, Jenny.
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Date: 7/6/2020 12:01:00 PM
- Many thanks for your comments and visits, Jenny :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 7/4/2020 10:29:00 AM
It seems you and your muse rejuvenated during your short vacation dearest, Anne-Lise! Although the theme is so sad the verses of your poem are dancing beautifully! Excellent write. Good luck. Hugs xxx
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Date: 7/6/2020 12:00:00 PM
- Refreshing with some vacation, my friend :) - Many thanks for your comments and visits :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Date: 7/4/2020 9:37:00 AM
Your photo spells the essence of your poem, Anne-Lise--your poem evokes touching emotions, especially in the final stanza. All the best.
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Date: 7/6/2020 11:58:00 AM
- ... thank you my friend, Vijay :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)