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30.08.2023

Anne-Lise Andresen
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Voice Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Eve Roper

1st place in the contest

The conductor has blown his whistle That sound brings back memories, which I had forgotten a long time ago The local train was then the connecting link between the village and the city The differences between the rich and the poor were obvious I could smell the expensive perfume Oh my ... where they embroidered ... they belonged to the circle of educated ladies The man with his tailored coat winked at me as he turned the page of the newspaper I had just turned 18, dressed in mine Sunday clothes and my mother's red hat My stomach felt as a spinning wheel of fortune An unknown city, a new community to make a living Women, especially young girls, was still of minor importance - compared to men The journey took three hours, no money for a seat drained all my savings Train travel was an investment, back in 1943

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Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 9/26/2023 3:33:00 AM

Wow this is a keeper Anne, I took the journey with you, congrats on your 1st place win, you are so talented girl !

Sotto Poet

Date: 9/25/2023 2:20:00 PM

Back with hearty congratulations on your contest win Anne-Lise.

Speaks Volumes

Date: 9/24/2023 9:33:00 PM

Back with Congrats and a big "I told you so " A well deserved win, my friend. It really did read like a winner. SV

Eve Roper

Date: 9/24/2023 8:41:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Anne-Lise Andresen. I love your poem. I like the line, "My stomach felt as a spinning wheel of fortune'. Many blessings to you

Hiya Sharma

Date: 9/4/2023 2:00:00 AM

Oh wow, this is quite an intriguing and nostalgic write which brings forth a myriad sense of imagery and depth.. So artistically crafted, with perfect skills of storytelling, love the details here.. A very wonderful take for the contest dear-

Curie Stark

Date: 9/1/2023 1:30:00 AM

Such a visually detailed poem,I loved it

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 9/1/2023 1:39:00 AM

- Curie, many thanks for the lovely comment :) - hugs

Jay Narain

Date: 8/31/2023 11:02:00 AM

Is that you standing with the conductor? You may not be a rich woman, but you looked dashing for your age. Nice memories of old times.

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 9/1/2023 1:39:00 AM

- Forever young ... :))) - Many thanks for the lovely comment, Jay :) - hugs

Speaks Volumes

Date: 8/31/2023 4:17:00 AM

This is lovely Anne-Lise A beautiful descriptive poem. BOL in the contest . It reads like a winner.

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 9/1/2023 1:38:00 AM

- Many thanks for the lovely comment, S.V. :) - hugs

Vijay Pandit

Date: 8/30/2023 2:45:00 PM

A clever take on the photo--I like your story weaved around the given images that spoke to you. Splendid.

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 9/1/2023 1:37:00 AM

- Vijay, many thanks for the lovely comment :) - hugs

Sotto Poet

Date: 8/30/2023 11:46:00 AM

Enjoyed reading your splendid verse, Anne-Lise. Your profound contemplation and tranquil essence are so comforting. Through your customary use of vivid imagery, you skillfully captured the beauty and inspiration of this train journey...a truly enchanting poem.

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/30/2023 1:00:00 PM

- This type of poem ... I am not comfortable with ... it turned out as it turned out ... many thanks for the lovely comment, Las :) - hugs