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---Torrents Cleanse

torrents cleanse... black soot ashes rush ferocious down drains of desire

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Charmaine Chircop

Date: 9/18/2009 5:59:00 PM

cleansing purifying spiritual healing of our ferocious soul--excellent monoku--bravo--Charma

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/18/2009 4:57:00 AM

Nicely done. Keep writing. Sara

Moonbee Canady

Date: 9/17/2009 3:17:00 PM

I Almost had it right... the minute I read It :)... I got it ! Especially about the ashes rush down drains of desire... to me tho' the torrents reminded me of tears. Very powerful sentence - it's like artwork... One persons sees it and it means one thing and to another, it means something else... Very Brilliant... MoonBee

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/17/2009 2:21:00 PM

When I write especially short verse every word I can has more than 1 meaning..above..torrents..alludes to water/outpourings/brings forth the image of the words torment or torture..cleanse..alludes to cleaning/purifying/disgarding...soot...is a residual/black/disguising....ashes..alludes to the mythical Phoenix/the remains of life/purification again.....drains...releases/reinforces the symbology of torrent...cleansing again etc. Hope this helps!

Elaine George

Date: 9/17/2009 1:55:00 PM

WOW!!!! Love, Lainie

Veronica Joseph

Date: 9/17/2009 12:03:00 PM

if you were to read it one way, torrents (of love? or it could be hate?) clease the black soot ashes of (indifference?) down the drains of desire. "drains of desire" seems to be a place you don't want to go instead of the place you most want to be (the object of desire) Very thought provoking.

Yoni Dvorkis

Date: 9/17/2009 7:48:00 AM

this has the intensity of swallowing a bullet train. I guess the cleansing is the theme but I'm not quite sure what the black soot ashes metaphor is supposed to be. whatever it is the poem deals with it very thoroughly and swiftly, really as only a one liner can. most intense of you wise one...:)

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/17/2009 4:29:00 AM

We have a Monoku Queen. Her name shall be Deborah. Fantastic. Love, Carol

James Marshall Goff

Date: 9/16/2009 8:51:00 PM

what remains?....good poem! Deb!...to answer your ?....the end of "Global Warning" refers to following generations never knowing the changes of seasons due to climate-change! MAIL!

John Freeman

Date: 9/16/2009 7:46:00 PM

Mercy, mercy, holy cow, how, you've got the soot and ashes ferociously flushing down that drain! Love must have been the torrent cleanser? Lol, Smile, Sincerely, Moses

Carrie Richards

Date: 9/16/2009 5:55:00 PM

Wow...this could be a whole world of emotional metaphors! Powerpacked Monoku! ....ps...soupmail!

Iolanda Scripca

Date: 9/16/2009 4:52:00 PM

A clever concentration in just one line, including the alliteration "down drains of desire" Beautiful! Love, Iolanda