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For Contest using lines one, nine and sixteen.

Sponsored by: Viv Wigley

I am setting the maximum length of poems for this at nineteen lines, but the rules still apply regarding placement of the following lines-

Line one: 'The spiral staircase made her high heels sing'

Line nine- ' From here the City churches pierced the mist'

Line sixteen ' He closed it, and, now smiling, crossed the square'

The spiral staircase made her high heels sing
A sound that had an old farmilar ring
That echoed through the chambers of her mind
Growing louder with every stair she climbed.

She'd climberd these stairs a thousand times before
And knocked upon that old forbidden door
Convinced each time she'd never come again
But here she was with all her rage unchained.

From here the city churches pierced the mist
Witness to their first sinful, blissful  kiss
And every sin they'd laid behind that door
Where her lust and conscience constantly waged war.

                                . . . 


From a jewellery store...he stepped into the night    
He'd convince her once again...he'd leave his wife
In a box.. a diamond ring...shaped like a pear
He closed it..and now smiling...crossed the square.

                                . . .

For  many years she'd swallowed...all his lies
But tonight...she would finally...sever all  ties
With a knife...stained with all the tears she cried.


 
Written:  May 14th, 2018
Author:  Elaine Cecelia George of Canada

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Tom Cunningham

Date: 6/20/2018 11:12:00 PM

Well done Elaine, congratulations. Tom

Elaine George
Date: 6/22/2018 9:55:00 AM

Thank you, Tom. Elaine

Viv Wigley

Date: 6/20/2018 11:11:00 PM

Congrats, Elaine, enjoyed your tense little write. Did he get to give her the ring before it was too late? Hmmmm... x

Elaine George
Date: 6/22/2018 9:55:00 AM

Thank you for sponsoring the contest, Viv...and for inspiring me. Elaine

J.W. Earnings

Date: 5/28/2018 5:28:00 AM

Wow wow wow...paints me a million scenes in my mind's frame and this is a poem that is the price of pure diamonds.-JWE

Elaine George
Date: 5/28/2018 3:34:00 PM

Thank you for stopping by, JW... and for your most welcomed comments. Elaine

Paul Callus

Date: 5/18/2018 4:58:00 PM

An excellent narrative dealing with a love triangle, Elaine. How sad that the only way she saw fit to get out of one entrapment was to lead her into another! In my eyes you have a winner:) Regards // paul

Elaine George
Date: 5/28/2018 3:34:00 PM

Thank you for stopping by, Paul... and for your most welcomed comments. Elaine

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/17/2018 9:17:00 AM

Wowzer, you rocked this one. I see a high placement in your future. A very enjoyable read.

Elaine George
Date: 5/29/2018 7:11:00 PM

Thank you for stopping by, Richard...and for your kind comments. Elaine

Maria Williams

Date: 5/16/2018 7:05:00 AM

A wonderful story Elaine, a very 'real life ' edge to it. So much for Mr Casanova, still I suppose he had it coming.Sad though. Good luck in the contest....Maria xxx

Elaine George
Date: 5/17/2018 3:02:00 AM

Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments, Maria...much appreciated. Elaine

Geoffrey Brewer

Date: 5/15/2018 9:56:00 PM

An effective dark and chilling metaphore of the spiral - gives an emotionally exciting frisson. Well created! Elaine.

Elaine George
Date: 5/17/2018 3:03:00 AM

Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments, Geoffrey...much appreciated. Elaine

Vijay Pandit

Date: 5/14/2018 7:04:00 AM

I see in the poem skills of a storyteller. Sad ending to their romance but true to life. Best for a win Elaine.

Elaine George
Date: 5/15/2018 10:47:00 AM

Thank you for stopping by, Vijay, and for your most appreciated comments. Lainey