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For Contest using lines one, nine and sixteen.

Sponsored by:  Viv Wigley

 

I am setting the maximum length of poems for this at nineteen lines, but the rules still apply regarding placement of the following lines-

Line one:  'The spiral staircase made her high heels sing'

Line nine- ' From here the City churches pierced the mist'

Line sixteen ' He closed it, and, now smiling, crossed the square'

The spiral staircase made her high heels sing A sound that had an old farmilar ring That echoed through the chambers of her mind Growing louder with every stair she climbed. She'd climberd these stairs a thousand times before And knocked upon that old forbidden door Convinced each time she'd never come again But here she was with all her rage unchained. From here the city churches pierced the mist Witness to their first sinful, blissful kiss And every sin they'd laid behind that door Where her lust and conscience constantly waged war. . . . From a jewellery store...he stepped into the night He'd convince her once again...he'd leave his wife In a box.. a diamond ring...shaped like a pear He closed it..and now smiling...crossed the square. . . . For many years she'd swallowed...all his lies But tonight...she would finally...sever all ties With a knife...stained with all the tears she cried. Written: May 14th, 2018 Author: Elaine Cecelia George of Canada

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 6/20/2018 11:12:00 PM
Well done Elaine, congratulations. Tom
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Elaine George
Date: 6/22/2018 9:55:00 AM
Thank you, Tom. Elaine
Date: 6/20/2018 11:11:00 PM
Congrats, Elaine, enjoyed your tense little write. Did he get to give her the ring before it was too late? Hmmmm... x
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Date: 6/22/2018 9:55:00 AM
Thank you for sponsoring the contest, Viv...and for inspiring me. Elaine
Date: 5/28/2018 5:28:00 AM
Wow wow wow...paints me a million scenes in my mind's frame and this is a poem that is the price of pure diamonds.-JWE
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Elaine George
Date: 5/28/2018 3:34:00 PM
Thank you for stopping by, JW... and for your most welcomed comments. Elaine
Date: 5/18/2018 4:58:00 PM
An excellent narrative dealing with a love triangle, Elaine. How sad that the only way she saw fit to get out of one entrapment was to lead her into another! In my eyes you have a winner:) Regards // paul
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Elaine George
Date: 5/28/2018 3:34:00 PM
Thank you for stopping by, Paul... and for your most welcomed comments. Elaine
Date: 5/17/2018 9:17:00 AM
Wowzer, you rocked this one. I see a high placement in your future. A very enjoyable read.
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Elaine George
Date: 5/29/2018 7:11:00 PM
Thank you for stopping by, Richard...and for your kind comments. Elaine
Date: 5/16/2018 7:05:00 AM
A wonderful story Elaine, a very 'real life ' edge to it. So much for Mr Casanova, still I suppose he had it coming.Sad though. Good luck in the contest....Maria xxx
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Elaine George
Date: 5/17/2018 3:02:00 AM
Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments, Maria...much appreciated. Elaine
Date: 5/15/2018 9:56:00 PM
An effective dark and chilling metaphore of the spiral - gives an emotionally exciting frisson. Well created! Elaine.
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Date: 5/17/2018 3:03:00 AM
Thank you for stopping by and for your kind comments, Geoffrey...much appreciated. Elaine
Date: 5/14/2018 7:04:00 AM
I see in the poem skills of a storyteller. Sad ending to their romance but true to life. Best for a win Elaine.
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Elaine George
Date: 5/15/2018 10:47:00 AM
Thank you for stopping by, Vijay, and for your most appreciated comments. Lainey

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