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Open Swim at Six

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Straight One-Rhymed Englyn, Sponsor: Mark Toney, See his contest for specifics

syllables 10,6,7,7

Poem inspired by my early morning workout in the instructional pool. I could see the other pool where the swimmers were doing their laps.

*a group of sharks is called a shiver

**Lark - A source or quest for amusement or adventure

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Open Swim at Six See many arms, like shark fins, in pool lanes. In laps, dusting off dark, The shiver starts on their mark. Young stars heading for the lark.

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/18/2025 12:23:00 PM

Congratulations on this creative winner. Way to go. Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara K

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/18/2025 3:22:00 PM

Thank you, Sara!

Joseph May

Date: 7/17/2025 7:02:00 PM

Congrats on your win Kim, Nicely done

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/18/2025 5:03:00 AM

Thank you, Joe!

thriveni c mysore

Date: 7/17/2025 7:15:00 AM

lovely. 'stars heading for the lark' Congratulations on your win dear poet. Cheers!!!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/17/2025 9:40:00 AM

Cheers! Thank you, Thriveni!

Suzette Richards

Date: 7/16/2025 12:28:00 PM

This is delightful. I see you used the alliteration option in line 2 - nice touch. Well done with your win, Kim, :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/16/2025 4:52:00 PM

Thank you, my friend!

Krishnanand Guptar

Date: 7/16/2025 12:07:00 PM

Congratulations, poet friend, on your win in this contest with a skilful write inspired form reality. The explanatory notes help better understand the imagery. Wish you a cheerful day.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/16/2025 12:13:00 PM

Thank you, Krishnanand! :)

Maclawrence Famuyiwa

Date: 7/16/2025 11:47:00 AM

Nicely written Kim. Congratulations.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/16/2025 12:13:00 PM

Thank you, Maclawrence!

Janice Canerdy

Date: 7/16/2025 6:57:00 AM

Kim, CONGRATS on your well-deserved win. Janice

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/16/2025 10:12:00 AM

Thank you, Janice!

Mark Toney

Date: 7/16/2025 6:45:00 AM

Kim, congratulations on your second-place win in my Straight One-Rhymed Englyn poetry contest! Your highly creative poem is just in time for Shark Week—July 20-26 ;)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/16/2025 10:13:00 AM

LOL! Cool…just in time for shark week! Thank you, Mark!

Charles Messina

Date: 6/20/2025 11:29:00 AM

Nicely done, Kim. I can't swim, but if I saw a shiver of sharks, I surely would learn how to really quick...especially if they were in my pool (lol) BOL in the contest!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/16/2025 10:13:00 AM

Thank you, Charles! LOL