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Open Swim at Six

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Straight One-Rhymed Englyn, Sponsor: Mark Toney, See his contest for specifics

syllables 10,6,7,7

Poem inspired by my early morning workout in the instructional pool. I could see the other pool where the swimmers were doing their laps.

*a group of sharks is called a shiver

**Lark - A source or quest for amusement or adventure

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Open Swim at Six See many arms, like shark fins, in pool lanes. In laps, dusting off dark, The shiver starts on their mark. Young stars heading for the lark.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2025


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Charles Messina
Date: 6/20/2025 11:29:00 AM
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Nicely done, Kim. I can't swim, but if I saw a shiver of sharks, I surely would learn how to really quick...especially if they were in my pool (lol) BOL in the contest!
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Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 6/17/2025 7:43:00 AM
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- "the shiver starts on their mark" ... feel it, "like shark fins" :) - Great done Kim, good luck in the contest :) - hugs
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/17/2025 8:51:00 AM
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Thank you, Anne-Lise!
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Joe Dimino
Date: 6/17/2025 4:07:00 AM
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Great imagery! Keep men out of women's sports. Exclamation!!!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/17/2025 5:53:00 AM
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I couldn’t agree more. A way is made for women and then they do that craziness! Thank you, Joe!
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Gershon Wolf
Date: 6/16/2025 8:49:00 PM
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That image of 'shark fins' speaks volumes, Kim. Poetry hugs, Gershon
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/17/2025 5:53:00 AM
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Thank you, Gershon! Poetry hugs!
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Anne Winter
Date: 6/16/2025 6:22:00 PM
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Dear Kim, the imagery is gorgeously atmospheric! Well written, my dear friend. Best, Anne
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/16/2025 6:34:00 PM
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Thank you, sweet Anne!
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 6/16/2025 5:39:00 PM
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Kim, your descriptive, skillfully-written poem paints an appealing picture. Janice
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/16/2025 6:34:00 PM
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Thank you, my friend!
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Yellow Rose
Date: 6/16/2025 4:15:00 PM
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liked the imagery! Didn't know a shiver is a group of sharks. Nicely done! yellow rose
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/16/2025 4:37:00 PM
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I looked it up…how interesting…a little scary :0
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Paige Hind
Date: 6/16/2025 4:11:00 PM
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This is really cool, Kim- "In laps, dusting off dark, The shiver starts...." hmmm....gorgeous,
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/16/2025 4:37:00 PM
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Thank you, Paige!

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