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Straight One-Rhymed Englyn, Sponsor: Mark Toney, See his contest for specifics

syllables 10,6,7,7

Poem inspired by my early morning workout in the instructional pool. I could see the other pool where the swimmers were doing their laps.

*a group of sharks is called a shiver

**Lark - A source or quest for amusement or adventure

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Open Swim at Six

Open Swim at Six

See many arms, like shark fins, in pool lanes.
In laps, dusting off dark,
The shiver starts on their mark.
Young stars heading for the lark.

sportsenglyn

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Sara Kendrick

July 18, 2025 at 12:23 PM

Congratulations on this creative winner. Way to go. Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara K

Kim Rodrigues

July 18, 2025 at 3:22 PM

Thank you, Sara!

Joseph May

July 17, 2025 at 7:02 PM

Congrats on your win Kim, Nicely done

Kim Rodrigues

July 18, 2025 at 5:03 AM

Thank you, Joe!

thriveni c mysore

July 17, 2025 at 7:15 AM

lovely. 'stars heading for the lark' Congratulations on your win dear poet. Cheers!!!

Kim Rodrigues

July 17, 2025 at 9:40 AM

Cheers! Thank you, Thriveni!

Suzette Richards

July 16, 2025 at 12:28 PM

This is delightful. I see you used the alliteration option in line 2 - nice touch. Well done with your win, Kim, :)

Kim Rodrigues

July 16, 2025 at 4:52 PM

Thank you, my friend!

Krishnanand Guptar

July 16, 2025 at 12:07 PM

Congratulations, poet friend, on your win in this contest with a skilful write inspired form reality. The explanatory notes help better understand the imagery. Wish you a cheerful day.

Kim Rodrigues

July 16, 2025 at 12:13 PM

Thank you, Krishnanand! :)

Maclawrence Famuyiwa

July 16, 2025 at 11:47 AM

Nicely written Kim. Congratulations.

Kim Rodrigues

July 16, 2025 at 12:13 PM

Thank you, Maclawrence!

Janice Canerdy

July 16, 2025 at 6:57 AM

Kim, CONGRATS on your well-deserved win. Janice

Kim Rodrigues

July 16, 2025 at 10:12 AM

Thank you, Janice!

Mark Toney

July 16, 2025 at 6:45 AM

Kim, congratulations on your second-place win in my Straight One-Rhymed Englyn poetry contest! Your highly creative poem is just in time for Shark Week—July 20-26 ;)

Kim Rodrigues

July 16, 2025 at 10:13 AM

LOL! Cool…just in time for shark week! Thank you, Mark!

Charles Messina

June 20, 2025 at 11:29 AM

Nicely done, Kim. I can't swim, but if I saw a shiver of sharks, I surely would learn how to really quick...especially if they were in my pool (lol) BOL in the contest!

Kim Rodrigues

July 16, 2025 at 10:13 AM

Thank you, Charles! LOL