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Cut The Carbs

I cut some carbs
From the home team
They were dead weight
If you know what I mean

They took their at bats
But were never a hit
Since they turned fat
And slowed me a bit

Yet it wasn’t easy
Shedding the weight
Of seasoned players
Who came to the plate

But now we’re leaner
And back in the game
Where losing is winning
In our hall of fame

Copyright © | Year Posted 2023




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Date: 12/28/2023 4:00:00 AM
Hi Dave, Very witty use of "carbs" as a double entendre. Once I started reading had to stay to the end! Enjoyed! Gail
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Date: 12/16/2023 3:21:00 PM
Love the humour of this poem David….fun! Debx
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Date: 12/13/2023 5:45:00 PM
Congatulations, David, we cheer for you. Your wit iz raxor sgarp, i think my blades are rather dull. So I leave it to experts likeyou, “To hit it out of the Park. Pleased to see, you win. Huzzah. Pangie
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Date: 12/11/2023 6:21:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a creative/fun write. Watch out for the carbs, they will get you every time. Have a blessed day writing away.......................
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Date: 12/10/2023 6:49:00 PM
This is a holiday reminder poem. There should be a Christmas salad, instead of a Christmas goose. A good job of poetic humor.
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David Fisher
Date: 12/12/2023 4:36:00 PM
Thanks for the kind words; and that's funny about the goose.
Date: 12/10/2023 12:09:00 PM
Its never so easy David.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 12/9/2023 6:10:00 PM
Love it, David. Nice share of humor in a poem with a great message. I hope it wins many over to your team, my friend. Have a pleasant weekend! Bill
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