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Cut The Carbs

I cut some carbs From the home team They were dead weight If you know what I mean They took their at bats But were never a hit Since they turned fat And slowed me a bit Yet it wasn’t easy Shedding the weight Of seasoned players Who came to the plate But now we’re leaner And back in the game Where losing is winning In our hall of fame

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Date: 12/28/2023 4:00:00 AM
Hi Dave, Very witty use of "carbs" as a double entendre. Once I started reading had to stay to the end! Enjoyed! Gail
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Date: 12/16/2023 3:21:00 PM
Love the humour of this poem David….fun! Debx
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Date: 12/13/2023 5:45:00 PM
Congatulations, David, we cheer for you. Your wit iz raxor sgarp, i think my blades are rather dull. So I leave it to experts likeyou, “To hit it out of the Park. Pleased to see, you win. Huzzah. Pangie
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Date: 12/11/2023 6:21:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a creative/fun write. Watch out for the carbs, they will get you every time. Have a blessed day writing away.......................
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Date: 12/10/2023 6:49:00 PM
This is a holiday reminder poem. There should be a Christmas salad, instead of a Christmas goose. A good job of poetic humor.
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David Fisher
Date: 12/12/2023 4:36:00 PM
Thanks for the kind words; and that's funny about the goose.
Date: 12/10/2023 12:09:00 PM
Its never so easy David.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 12/9/2023 6:10:00 PM
Love it, David. Nice share of humor in a poem with a great message. I hope it wins many over to your team, my friend. Have a pleasant weekend! Bill
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