David Fisher Poet Rhyme

Cut The Carbs

I cut some carbs
From the home team
They were dead weight
If you know what I mean

They took their at bats
But were never a hit
Since they turned fat
And slowed me a bit

Yet it wasn’t easy
Shedding the weight
Of seasoned players
Who came to the plate

But now we’re leaner
And back in the game
Where losing is winning
In our hall of fame

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Gail Debole December 28, 2023 at 4:00 AM Hi Dave, Very witty use of "carbs" as a double entendre. Once I started reading had to stay to the end! Enjoyed! Gail

Deb M December 16, 2023 at 3:21 PM Love the humour of this poem David….fun! Debx

Panagiota Romios December 13, 2023 at 5:45 PM Congatulations, David, we cheer for you. Your wit iz raxor sgarp, i think my blades are rather dull. So I leave it to experts likeyou, “To hit it out of the Park. Pleased to see, you win. Huzzah. Pangie

Paula Goldsmith December 11, 2023 at 6:21 AM Congratulations on your win. What a creative/fun write. Watch out for the carbs, they will get you every time. Have a blessed day writing away.......................

Hilda Greenhough December 10, 2023 at 6:49 PM This is a holiday reminder poem. There should be a Christmas salad, instead of a Christmas goose. A good job of poetic humor. David Fisher December 12, 2023 at 4:36 PM Thanks for the kind words; and that's funny about the goose.

Silent One December 10, 2023 at 12:09 PM Its never so easy David.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Bill Baker December 9, 2023 at 6:10 PM Love it, David. Nice share of humor in a poem with a great message. I hope it wins many over to your team, my friend. Have a pleasant weekend! Bill