As You Were Sleeping

The clouds are torn down
they're hers as they mist 
where pillow seeps; where
dark, no woman sleeps

for she's knotted
a cruel twist in female 
sheets — secret fingers long   
where short the dreams  

Eyes nestle a phantom or
a tree — shut closet,
my innermost girl has me 
wafting above her keep — 
           asleep
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Date: 6/8/2025 6:58:00 PM
The night is vividly described in this beautiful poem, which has vivid imagery, Paige.
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Date: 6/5/2025 9:35:00 AM
I see your eyes opening and shutting as dreams take hold
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Date: 6/4/2025 12:46:00 PM
- A restless night of dreams... great written, Paige :) - hugs
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Date: 6/4/2025 5:44:00 AM
Dear Paige, It is like a half-remembered dream that is so haunting, intimate, and beautifully unresolved. Your imagery is both delicate and raw, filled with the secret twists and phantom longings that visit us in sleep. Very evocative piece. Poetry can cradle our innermost selves, even as we drift above the world. Spring Blessings, My Dear Paige, Daniel
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Date: 6/3/2025 2:26:00 PM
Everything takes on a new meaning in the dark, Paige. You have wonderfully expressed that experience with your unique images. Thank you for sharing this poem. Enjoyed! Blessings.
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Date: 6/3/2025 12:11:00 PM
Sleep could only be restless in such turmoil, Paige. Tears as mist from clouds... sadness lingers.
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Date: 6/3/2025 5:25:00 AM
A wonderful poem, great imagery and a wonderful description of night.
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Date: 6/3/2025 3:15:00 AM
Sometimes i see the clouds the same way, and the night sky as youv described, how evocative and heartfelt are your lines! And i love how you use nature and create metaphors and express in such original and unique ways! Pleasure reading your poem today! Sending you light always
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Date: 6/2/2025 11:17:00 PM
To me it sounds like a woman haunted by her past. Great atmosphere especially at the end
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Date: 6/2/2025 5:37:00 PM
whilst she sleeps others come as clouds above in astonishment i presume and of skeletons in the closet perhaps, many have many don't we tho? ~ enjoyable read, Paige!
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