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6/22/2017 6:24:02 PM
Introduction and Plea	Hello everyone, I'm Amos Joshua from Nigeria, really glad to be among you guys. I'm looking to improve myself here, and for that I need your support. Please do not hesitate to critique my poems. Your views and opinions would go along way to improving my poetry. Thanks a million for your anticipated support...
6/23/2017 6:23:32 PM
Please tell me what you think about this poem...	TWISTED FATE… He left with the early train He left in the rain He had left only a letter He didn't bother to wake her As she slept like peace, a glow on her face Bathed in the memories of the pleasure; the pleasures of the night, memories she can't erase For she wanted the night to last forever... She woke up to find no one there Just a paper, staring from the chair. She rushed to read, her face colored with smiles Then it all changed as she read the first eight lines: "Sorry Stacey, but I had to leave, Behind the glass I've kept our ring, And a divorce note, please read it through, She's expecting my child, this marriage can't continue..." "Yes I've been seeing her, her name is Shyer, Since you couldn't bear, I had to try her. I need a child, you know that more, Ten years and you could't bear, I'm moving on." She dried the tears, but in vain she tried Lost in the confusion of whether or not to cry And last night? Was all that a lie? Within the next few weeks she had died For she could no longer tell if she was alive She waited to wake up from this dreadful dream But each day the pain in her heart reminded her it was all real. Still not a single word from him Her hold onto life had grown thin... Food irritated her Her smiles had neglected her She feared to sleep,she feared to stay awake With swollen eyes and a convulsive head quake She was alive, yet she had died She was put to death by those eight lines... Two more weeks and she sat dazed before the doctor Lost in shock, as she read the test results. "Congratulations Stacey; this time you scaled through, You are pregnant, and more so, with twins... edited by Joshbipi on 6/23/2017
6/27/2017 6:41:05 PM
Please tell me what you think about this poem...	Thank you ma'am
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