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4/26/2017 7:17:06 PM
Love for the Moment	I really want to be a better writer so I've been looking for tough critique online (because friends, even good ones, often will not) so any help at all is very much appreciated. I get Addicted To her Novocaine Moments, The times where She makes Everything Quiet. She lights fires In places I can’t See, Burns tattoo-like Days into my palms So I’ll never forget. And I won’t. Take my hand And I’ll swallow you Like an angry God- A distant God- One I can’t find Myself Believing in. Then, Tap into my Soul Like a maple tree, It bleeds out Memories And heartbreak Hopefulness, Like this time It will be Different. No two Loves Are the same, Or even Comparable- I’d say I love you now For who you are Currently, Just as some don’t love Anymore For who I have Become. But, I’d say, I love you Wholeheartedly. I’d say, Take this kiss- It’ll be different tomorrow, Or even today, In the late afternoon- But Just like how vines grow Together up poles I’d say I want to grow With you, Together, Entwined like vines Or wires Or cotton fibers- I just know that Things do grow Apart, Too. I’d say, You burn brighter. But fuses burn bright When they burst And I’m more wary now Than ever About love that feels like Fire, About a touch that burns Deeper Than cooling charcoal Embers- I want Something That feels like peace Or serenity Or maybe Just a quiet spot Somewhere Away from all these People, My thoughts. I deal in Somedays, Which is to say That I dream of a Love to be, Which is to say That I love the idea Of tomorrow More than living today, Or remembering Yesterday And if I remember Any of this, Of you and I, It’s because you are Something I never wanted to Forget.
6/13/2017 10:26:41 AM
Review and Revision: Thoughts During Sex	Teeth on your neck, Warm breath And the kind of heat Only another body Could create When it touches you- Fingertips colliding In the darkness, Folding lips Devouring, Dividing and conquering Everything left to be Discovered- We are quickly running Out of secrets…. Paper skin that inks Red For days before fading, Waiting to be Rewritten; I've never known A love Not defined by A purpose For pain, A tolerance to give So you can take In return- I only know how to Devour, Divide and conquer A body, Sweet talk the guards Of that glorious Temple So I can kneel At your altar To pray, Say amen in your name, Whisper words In darkness like A firm believer, Light a fire To teach you What if feels like to be Burning From the inside…. So let the flames Lick your Eyes, Gleam In the street-light Outside That was our only witness- Oh, God I roleplay a mean Servant of deliverance- No one has ever Bothered to study A religion such as you…. And maybe I can fill myself, Go home And feel whole The next day, Body Like a live wire In the wake Of a Hurricane That blew, Fiercely, Through the night- We are only in the eye And I can be your Sleeping Beauty In the sunlight- But I've tried Happily Ever After And if you can climb Past my magic defenses, Of roses and walls So tall a giant Could not scale them Then I will knight you And make you my Queen… But like a fairytale I don't last Forever And only Disney Managed to make my Story Look pretty- Let's remember This all started With Whispered discoveries- Teeth on your neck, Warm breath And the kind of heat Only another body Could create.
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