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6/24/2016 10:31:44 PM
Can someone critique my poem about a ant death	I wrote this poem after seeing the death of a ant. Upon Montreal evergreen stone, Urban sounds, trotted in flash of light The stone shook, thunderings in wounds Thou paladin agony, was second long Upon grounds of worthy fought Where battles, swirl in moonlight Howling tunes of great combat Where gleaming shields, clash With Giants of Montreal Gentle gaint, looked upon ant With smiling, eyes dying So thus his song was sorrowful To see thou paladin in agony Thus burial was crafted, Gently, with childish hands Your muse of healing hearts Happily, praise your inter camelot Tearful Gaint, wrote upon stele Of paladin great purpose, His wroth in earthen realms Giving incense for afterlife
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6/24/2016 10:31:44 PM

Can someone critique my poem about a ant death

I wrote this poem after seeing the death of a ant.

Upon Montreal evergreen stone,
Urban sounds, trotted in flash of light
The stone shook, thunderings in wounds
Thou paladin agony, was second long

Upon grounds of worthy fought
Where battles, swirl in moonlight
Howling tunes of great combat
Where gleaming shields, clash
With Giants of Montreal

Gentle gaint, looked upon ant
With smiling, eyes dying
So thus his song was sorrowful
To see thou paladin in agony

Thus burial was crafted,
Gently, with childish hands
Your muse of healing hearts
Happily, praise your inter camelot

Tearful Gaint, wrote upon stele
Of paladin great purpose,
His wroth in earthen realms
Giving incense for afterlife

pages: 1