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3/29/2016 9:16:24 AM
Please help me edit/feedback on my poem!	Silver spoon My goal is to be successful in all that I do I wasn’t born with a silver spoon in my mouth But am fortunate enough to be given the gift of life Which has the same value As those born with a silver spoon I wasn’t born with a silver spoon in my mouth But I am fortunate enough to be given The chance to earn a rusty one Imagine having to dust and polish the one That I may call my own I wasn’t born with a silver spoon in my mouth But I am fortunate enough to be given time That is equivalent to those born with a silver spoon I wasn’t born with a spoon in my mouth But I can assure you that it’s a step If I just lift up my feet I’ll move fast with force I wasn’t born with a silver spoon in my mouth But I was born with hard work running though My veins Because sweating blood is my only option, Earning my own silver spoon Is a privilege indeed! edited by CKarn on 3/29/2016
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3/29/2016 9:16:24 AM

Please help me edit/feedback on my poem!

Silver spoon
My goal is to be successful in all that I do
I wasn’t born with a silver spoon in my mouth
But am fortunate enough to be given the gift of life
Which has the same value
As those born with a silver spoon
I wasn’t born with a silver spoon in my mouth
But I am fortunate enough to be given
The chance to earn a rusty one
Imagine having to dust and polish the one
That I may call my own
I wasn’t born with a silver spoon in my mouth
But I am fortunate enough to be given time
That is equivalent to those born with a silver spoon
I wasn’t born with a spoon in my mouth
But I can assure you that it’s a step
If I just lift up my feet
I’ll move fast with force
I wasn’t born with a silver spoon in my mouth
But I was born with hard work running though
My veins
Because sweating blood is my only option,
Earning my own silver spoon
Is a privilege indeed!
edited by CKarn on 3/29/2016

pages: 1