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6/24/2014 11:32:00 AM
New to poetry soup, looking to get insight	Hi everyone, I recently joined poetry soup, I posted 4 poems so far and am unsure what kind of poems I write. I enjoy writing and published my first poem "a second thought" followed by its part two called "across the floor". I would really appreciate it if my fellow members would read and comment. I enjoy reading what this community thinks of my writing. Thank you everyone, your new member, Hani Gholami.
7/1/2014 8:56:57 PM
a second thought" read and critique.	You buy her a rose. Make your way downtown only to find out through a text she wants to see other people. You go to throw away your rose......but before you do, it hits you. The flower is no less beautiful. It smells just as heavenly. The world still turns and you notice all the eyes on you and your beautiful flower.... What a lucky girl she must be they think. What a lucky guy I am I think. To hold such a elegant flower. He leaves it on the train seat and leaves.
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