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Adberian
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8/23/2012 12:54:19 AM
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I would love your opinions. :)
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This poem is still quite rough, but I seem to have hit a rock. Any and all feedback would be fantastic! Thank you in advance.
It’s a hunger for you One you can’t satisfy You settle down Then you wonder why Tie one down Then on to the next With little mind To those you oppress But without runners There is no race No way for you To taste the chase With your sly tongue And your foolish smile Recruiting isn’t hard But you’ll bore after a while edited by Adberian on 8/23/2012
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