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11/2/2019 1:41:28 PM
My first piece of work- Please Review	Hello! This is my very first piece and I don't even know if I am posting this correctly. I am brand-new to Poetry Soup. I loved to write in high school but have not written since. I am currently on a self journey rediscovering who I am as a person and not just a mother. And for the first time in 16 years I was feeling compelled to write down my thoughts when I was inspired. I know this is very raw and I am worried a bit immature, but so is the subject matter. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE REVIEW, I would love feedback You bestcheck your arrogance there is adifference between narcissism and confidence If you don’tknow the distinction my dear, it’s not your competence It’s thisdamn social media filled nation- Shoving itinto your face, to the point of suffocation Findvalidation and victory in your accomplishments True beautyis found in things like your heart or intelligence. Becausedefining who you are in your appearance alone in itself Will onlyleave you thirsting for more - and destroy your mental health. Drinkingfrom the social media cup is like drinking water from the sea No matterhow many “likes” you get; you will always be left thirsty. Whenkindness, knowledge and your sanity- Are moreimportant than your vanity That’s beingtrue to and loving yourself Can’t nobodyput that love on a shelf It’s okay tospend time on your make-up and hair But if youdon’t have the time- don’t worry, don’t care So go ahead,let your style be on fleek – and if youenjoy it, work on your physic. To all thegirls and women everywhere We arestronger together so don’t compare. Becauseanother’s beauty is not the absence of your own You areworth so much more than a perfect picture on your phone. Loveyourself more than your selfie -Know your worth and times it by three That’s theamount of respect you should come to expect from anybody. And yesdear, yourself included. Please don’tlet your self-image become convoluted. Be strong,brave, clever and kind. Because thethings the matter come from your heart and mind.
11/2/2019 1:51:06 PM
PoetrySoup Frequently Asked Questions	how do I edit my post. When I copied and pasted it came with a million typos and ruins my poem
11/2/2019 1:52:51 PM
My first piece of work- Please Review	I do not know why spaces were removed when I posted this. It is frustrating and ruins it. Does anybody know how to edit a post?
11/2/2019 2:01:29 PM
Please Review-1st piece of work and need feed back	You best check your arrogance there is a difference between narcissism and confidence If you don’t know the distinction my dear, it’s not your competence It’s this damn social media filled nation- Shoving it into your face, to the point of suffocation Find validation and victory in your accomplishments True beauty is found in things like your heart or intelligence. Because defining who you are in your appearance alone in itself Will only leave you thirsting for more - and destroy your mental health. Drinking from the social media cup is like drinking water from the sea No matter how many “likes” you get; you will always be left thirsty. When kindness, knowledge and your sanity- Are more important than your vanity That’s being true to and loving yourself Can’t nobody put that love on a shelf It’s okay to spend time on your make-up and hair But if you don’t have the time- don’t worry, don’t care So go ahead,let your style be on fleek – and if you enjoy it, work on your physic. To all the girls and women everywhere We are stronger together so don’t compare. Because another’s beauty is not the absence of your own You are worth so much more than a perfect picture on your phone. Love yourself more than your selfie -Know your worth and times it by three That’s the amount of respect you should come to expect from anybody. And yes dear, yourself included. Please don’t let your self-image become convoluted. Be strong,brave, clever and kind. Because the things the matter come from your heart and mind.
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