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9/12/2019 7:09:25 PM
HIGH CRITIQUE PLEASE! RUTHLESS FEEDBACK ONLY	Significant Another My eyes touch your lips and whisper look - you hear and sit satiated, flicking through some undeveloped polaroids you shake frantically. A silent forest fire blazes dangerously as you sit coy, crossing your legs, but I can hear a clock thud tick tock in the room. A sudden burst of rain hits the window panes lustily tonight; lightening tickles you to the core. The storm roars a deep, heavy cry. Now you and I meet eye to eye; we come together in our frame. Those photographs don't lie my love, let's hide our dark, dirty secret. edited by Victoria Teo on 9/12/2019 edited by Victoria Teo on 9/12/2019
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9/12/2019 7:09:25 PM

HIGH CRITIQUE PLEASE! RUTHLESS FEEDBACK ONLY

Significant Another

My eyes touch your lips and whisper
look - you hear and sit satiated,
flicking through some undeveloped
polaroids you shake frantically.

A silent forest fire blazes
dangerously as you sit coy,
crossing your legs, but I can hear
a clock thud tick tock in the room.

A sudden burst of rain hits the
window panes lustily tonight;
lightening tickles you to the core.
The storm roars a deep, heavy cry.

Now you and I meet eye to eye;
we come together in our frame.
Those photographs don't lie my love,
let's hide our dark, dirty secret.

edited by Victoria Teo on 9/12/2019
edited by Victoria Teo on 9/12/2019

pages: 1