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7/18/2023 1:50:10 PM

Elizabeth Moroz
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Hiye I’m new here and absolutely love the range and depth of Poetry you all create.

If anyone has time I would be honored if you could critique my poem Signs of the Times

I’m not sure if it’s any good or not

Any comments or critique would be greatly appreciated

With thanks for your consideration,

Elizabeth Moroz

Signs of the Times

Signs of the Times A dictator-ship sailing the seven seas A night-birds song on the evenings breeze An unorthodox relationship with anti-freeze The heimleck manoeuvre over a piece of cheese Nuclear undertones among armies of genetic clones Spectacular telephones in secluded containment zones Grand consultations with lethal, hybrid, danger drones A third world without water, the rest without homes A morbid fascination with decay and dying A forward obfuscation of delay while obviously lying The suffering and sorrow of the human race collectively sighing A problematic tomorrow rises above the sound of crying The lethal gap between the rich and poor The leaking tap of a society that always asks for more The genius rap of a prophet on the street and looking to score A dying trees sap, an earth damaged to the core. Famine, poverty, war and fame The gravity, the longevity , oh what’s really in a name? The terrible rules of the universal game A planet in catastrophe, mankind covered in shame. The war upon terror, the battle of the sexes, A fundamental error, a delayed response in reflexes Pretending that we’re too clever to have to rectify our mistakes We missed the signs upon the weather, there is no time to double-take The urgency of poverty, the agony of war The name of Deuteronomy, did creation come before ? Reflective ideology , a sacrificial whore The blatant furiosity, as we ask what it’s all for? Human traffic costing less than a nominal fee The graphic illusion of what it means to be free I once was blind but now I see The ecstatic bemusement of the hegemony Collisions and derisions of an atmosphere in dire need Incisions and precisions of the innocent who were never freed The injustice of the decisions motivated by pure greed The visions of the ghettos bound by an underprivileged need A biological disaster brings the loss of unique species and fauna A diabolical embalmer of treaties and trauma Whatever happens don’t ever let me say that I didn’t warn you That this planet needs a reboot before artificial intelligence decides to storm through So collectively preoccupied with monetary funding economic success We consequentially frameinjustices by worshipping “the best” So bless the broken systems, send light to the blood stains on the wall Give strength to the grander visions, lest we overcome it all. Gather your provisions just as even the grandest of us fall Make your own ethical decisions so that you can stand tall among it all.

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