Poetry Forum

Forum Home » High Critique » This is my first poem, asking for some insight

For poets who want unrestricted constructive criticism. This is NOT a vanity workshop. If you do not want your poem seriously critiqued, do not post here. Constructive criticism only. PLEASE Only Post One Poem a Day!!!

5/15/2023 10:49:24 AM Deborah Diaz Posts: 2	The Whispers of Lonesome Strength A sentiment of lonesomeness embraces my soul As I deeper try to occult the despair the more it seems to conquer myself What amplifies the unfortunate plight originates from my only source of rest I have come to embrace the bittersweet yet empowering realization that I am my own unwavering support And in the presence of love's possibly, I can't know with certainty Yet, the hope shall prevail
	• permalink • reply with quote
5/15/2023 7:24:40 PM Bob Atkinson Posts: 294	Lovely poem. Rare gift you have to show emotion so well. "Poetry, the Emotional Content of Literature" "Prose, the factual or pseudo factual content of literature" Suggestion? Write, write,write.. Don't judge yourself, let your freedom of thought go unchallenged. Expect that after your 100th poem done this way nobody could challenge your skills.
	• permalink • reply with quote
5/27/2023 11:47:21 PM Sally Harris Posts: 6	i completely agree. very nice for your first poem. i like the depth. you do have a talent. may i ask how old you are and what inspired you to write your first poem? and yes, write write write. and dont compare your style to others. be yourself and let it flow. dont get caught up in one line critiquing it too much. you can always go back later and edit and revise.
	• permalink • reply with quote
5/28/2023 9:54:10 AM Deborah Diaz Posts: 2	Thanks for the reply! I am currently 15. I really didn't have any inspiration, I just took a paper and started to write. We were reading the Merchant of Venice in class (great play in my opinion), so that probably has something to do with it
	• permalink • reply with quote