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3/16/2023 1:02:27 PM
Jenny Gargarello Posts: 4
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Starlight transmissions on divine caravans Sing a song as you drive that metal magnificence Through the arid desert and along the coastal highway
In the morning gather round the campfire
Of your intellects brazen bridge Collapsing into a stream of ancient tears A rivulet that dances upon your mirrored heart
The day spreads open like a beautiful sunflower
So many seeds to sow in the breeze Never knowing if anything grows All you can see is a reflection of your own blooms
You reread the etchings you left behind
Sometimes you glimpse a side road It takes you through a dark and intimidating forest Until you come to a vast clearing where the sky
Seems as infinite as nothing else you have ever known
In the clarity the magic is something that you realize has been with you since the dawn
This day may never end
But you understand the purpose of confusion It decorates your crystal balls and tarot that you tossed when it was obvious
That the future never came
..... Hi my name is Jenny Gargarello and I am new to this forum. I am looking for open, honest critique. Thank you so much. edited by realitysurfer on 3/16/2023
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