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12/19/2022 8:30:44 PM Ms Affection Posts: 9	“Who are you?”, I asked one day Her puzzled look blew my mind Within herself she was trying to find But had no idea to my dismay Despite the confidence she tried to display The years of pretense she couldn’t unbind Long lost time, no rewind “Who am I”?, the lines were grey “Ahhhaa moment”, it came to her Realizing, she had to step away From deception that caused her identity to blur Freedom within, she would no longer stray To a place that masked the real her True found self, here to stay
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12/23/2022 9:57:24 AM Di11y Da11y Posts: 17	Hi, I'm no poetry expert so can only talk of my own preferences. Your poem has the right essence but just looks to need a reflective edit. Sometimes I find the rhymes or line orders can be reordered or tweaked to make a real difference. I think, but I'm not expert, there may be a little bit that can improve the flow but the concept and central theme are put across really well.
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2/28/2023 4:49:57 AM John OZEMKO Posts: 6	I don't see any images in this piece. Is double spaced lines needed?
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3/16/2023 1:12:51 PM Jenny Gargarello Posts: 4	I thought your poem was very meaningful and well written. I might single space it. Otherwise, I think it is great.
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