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7/14/2022 7:00:38 PM Dana Walker Posts: 1	There's a difference between you and me, Unfortunately no one opens up enough to see. Trust and respect is what we are told, But being the nice guy is getting old. While growing into the woman i am today, I made a few bad choices along the way. Family, friends and strangers too, Will always have their own opinion of you. My past is something i cannot escape, Because everyone is holding onto my mistakes. Im not the same girl you knew last year, If given the chance you'll have nothing to fear. No lies, no games, no bullshit i promise, I may hurt your feelings but ill always be honest. I wanna be friends and give you a shout, Say that to a man n he thinks ill put out. Changing my ways n doing things right, Yet friendships n relationships still end in a fight. What am i doing wrong to all of you? Im trying my best yet im still getting screwed. Second chances are given n im always there, But when im in need all i see is an empty chair. Do i turn my back n become a bitch, Turn on and off like a light switch? Because thats what i see in everyone i know, I cant take it no more its starting to show. My walls are up high n very tight, I wont let them down without one hell of a fight. I wanna be shown that im important n special, Seems to me that its just to stressful. Im sorry for the things ive said n done, I wish that forgiveness will be given by someone. Almost 30 and its been a crazy life, I just wanna stop paying the price. I've learned my lesson n laid in my bed, Wont do it again, id rather be dead. All i want is to be given a chance, I think i deserve another look, another glance. If not just know i do understand, I realize **** got way outta hand. Even if you wont give me a try, My life ill live with my head held high. Yes there's a difference between you n me, Im going to let go n finally be free!
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7/17/2022 3:19:45 PM Sandra Doolan Posts: 2	G’day to you Hey, I’ll be your friend, I’ll give you a go. So send me a text, I’ve had my share of strife. Who knows, we could be friends for life. I loved your poem, very impressive. My email address is sandradoolan1@hotmail.com, you can never have too many friends. Take care. Warm regards Sandra
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10/22/2022 11:53:26 AM EOTrees Myles Posts: 14	This one of the modt sincere and raw poems that I've read so far. true and real. I would follow you anywhere till the very end. Brillant and well stated. Thank you. -- E.O.-Tree"s Myles
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