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12/30/2011 11:25:15 AM
Grace Williams Posts: 1
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What do you think about this poem? I would love for someone to critique it.
We two aged friends were caught today, By shared glance. Words I could not say entranced. Not you, new friends looked on, As old friends spoke. The grey false dawn Broke thoughts while round us sunset played Once, enemies trapped in the fray, Alike, but souls between us lay We two aged friends. Freed, parted, only you could pray Cold comfort: if we’d met halfway Then emptiness would be foregone, Swan fletched arrows not be withdrawn, You loved not, yet this eve you stayed. We two aged friends.
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