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7/12/2021 6:39:26 AM
Brian Roberts Posts: 3
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The Amourette Autopsy In vesper’s curt caress there seems no bind To daylight’s brim or morning’s dire decree- Your vertigo embrace confounded vows, Within a steel wheeled cauldron we stirred swamps We hyperventilated hurricanes Cajoled embraces, arrogated from your groom and registry and welling eyes; Celestial bliss, we buzzed God's prayer vault. We even deemed the telescopic murk a trough where genuflections might could reach; You spun away to opium dens, supine, I could not trace Icarian designs. You tiptoed the obituary scene Without your leaving even a toe’s wake- But in your swirl you must have slipped but once in its ambitious, enterprising ink. Oh butterfly why you abjured your wings, Regressed to the cocoon womb’s staid address? I wish I could interrogate your wraith by dream, concussion, disembodiment. Enraptured by your sallow soft trained tress- drapes gaped to manifest seraphic tones of fairness, though distraught by varying hues that sapience esteems the bends of life
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7/20/2021 9:15:00 AM
WriteEssays ForMoney Posts: 1
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nice!
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8/27/2021 1:35:48 AM
Eduardo Richardson Posts: 65
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It's just incredibly cool written. Oh butterfly why you abjured your wings, Regressed to the cocoon womb's staid address? I liked these lines very much, very deep thoughts.
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