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12/22/2011 11:48:36 AM

joe king
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This vast ocean is streching beyond my horizons
this ocean is a dark storm filled hell
My sorrowful waters contain hordes of demons
waiting to pull me down and drown me within its vast emptiness
This ocean will hide me even from my loving angel
who is seeking to free me from its violent grasp
I must survive this frozen place to be reunited with my angel
for i must protect her fragile heart from this evil place
My sorrowfull ocean is forever stretching
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