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12/20/2011 4:54:57 PM

There is a castle

Atop the sea.

Bathed in rays of light.

Like angels of

The heavens fair

Are there to make them bright.

And to the land

So gray and bleak

A dark cloud sits above

To make the people

Of this place

Long for heavens love.

A broken fence

Upon the beach

Points between the two

As if dividing

Light from dark

Whatever shall they do?

Don't forget there's always hope

Still round the corner

There may wait

A new road

Or a secret gate

What is thy people's fate?
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