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12/19/2011 12:35:33 AM

Jeron Adams
Posts: 3
Hidden deeply in the disparadised mind;
Lays a spot where hope fails to rise.
Disapprobation of crosses, crescents, and stars,
Eidolicly veiled over our internal scars.
Reason allows and insidiously leads, through the ghastlyrealm of immortality.

Saints may follow, yet will never lead;
Zealously trying to help you regain your blind normalcy.
This and that may temporarily ease the sore.
The material bliss is quickly lost, once again aware of
Your place as times required whore.

Oh! With the outmost certainty, even the worms
Will succumb to the rot of eternity.
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12/19/2011 12:59:00 AM

Jeron Adams
Posts: 3
Please just let me know if you like it or not; this is my first time showing my poems to people and want honest feedback... Thankyou
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