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3/2/2021 7:20:23 PM

Yonathan Asefaw
Posts: 9

The burly man had debt to pay.
Living in his snowy city there
he stood waiting for the
tax-payer to pay up.
He leaves out a number
and address to pay up for
tomorrow. I dare not know
what he will do next.
But in the snow, he waits
for his next hunt.
He adds that work penned
like an epic needs to be
addressed to the tax-payer.
He continues to scribble languages
in his pen, the day looming
over to night. A cycle of darkness
begins and he sits in his home
waiting for his debt. He will pay
he says, and when the moon
comes avalanching to sunlight.
He waits in his flat.
The tax-payer is around here somewhere
he says.
And he wonders this for a time.
The man with his crewcut face
and crewcut hair scratches his
head wondering where he is now.
But the day ahead looms again.
He continues to wait for his
payment, he hopes someone answers.

edited by LoomingSun on 3/2/2021
edited by LoomingSun on 3/2/2021
edited by LoomingSun on 3/2/2021

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